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-- Thu Apr 07, 2011 1:41 pm --

Uppin for votes

At 14 years old you ain't making no money
You get sick and tell mommy you ache in the tummy.
Weak opener. Just a diss

You fucking actress, go practice,come back and get your ass whipped.
That's it!!I've had it with the garbage pail trash bitch.
I liked the multies and the structure here. Decent diss

Go home Money..the street lights just clicked on..
Tell your mommy that you're crying cause you just got picked on.
EH..

Broke as fuck, you got no job and I know you don't sell..
This walking contradiction is a MONEYMAKER? What the hell?
I see where you went here but could of flipped it harder.

Your age alone means your nothing major you fucking minor.
step in my world and get your ass ROBbed like mr. Riener.
decent punch. Could of worded it different but still aiight

I remember 14 years ago I fucked a bitch who looked like your mother.
Damn Money...I mean sonny..FUCK..I should've wore a rubber!
funny diss decent closer

Money..
Ayo, watch this G get a L like he was wished good luck/
Moneymaker a noob but fuck with me and get ya tooth plucked/
nice multies but weak diss

Ya coof crushed,brain matter splattered like a squashed fruit gush/
When I'm done you gone be in all black like you covered In soot son/
decent punch

He aint the Grimm Reaper, hes the Grimm Raper son, hes a 41/
Year old pedophile tryna get wild on a child thats his only son/
Still not sure WTF you were thinkin' here

Everytime Grimm arrive the elderly laugh n kids scream stranger danger/
Grim the type of sick fuck to stick his one-inch dick up in a baby's manger/
lol nice multies but i dono

I'm gonna leave Grim flatlined incritical condintion/
Incorperate-it into a fast rhyme to extradite his physical extinction/
nice bar here

lyrically amputate this G's "prick" like hes infested with gane green and syphillis/
Yea hes sick, got a disease destined for "death" he got in molester sector for "feeling kids"/
nice put you added too much which threw the bar off and the rhyme scheme you had going.

Multies - Moneymaker
Disses - Grimm
Punches - Moneymaker
Vocab - Moneymaker
Vote - Moneymaker

Close battle IMO and it could of went either way.

2-2 uppin for some votes

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flow tie
punches grim
personals money
creativiey tie

mvgt money imo

3-2

-- Tue Apr 12, 2011 3:54 am --

wait...it's 3-3...statics vote does count cause he has a battle...

This battle is at 3-3 in the voting department.

Ight uppin for votes

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upping to close this

Uppin for some votes

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As far as Grim's verse is concerned, this is probably the weakest Ive seen come from him... Really he just threw disses out there more than anything, and seemed like he forgot what a punchline was.
Money, this is one of the better verses I have seen from you. I think it helps you alot more to come with the punchlines angle than the diss angle, as you seem you are better with that and keep the concept of punchlines more.

My vote goes to Money on this one. Better over-all verse.

4-3 money

lookin for some more votes

GRIM

At 14 years old you ain't making no money
You get sick and tell mommy you ache in the tummy.
You fucking actress, go practice,come back and get your ass whipped.
That's it!!I've had it with the garbage pail trash bitch.
Well no, I dont like this what so ever. No real punches or personals, rhyming was rather basic
Go home Money..the street lights just clicked on..
Tell your mommy that you're crying cause you just got picked on.
Man, this is an insult, not a punchline. BASIC
Broke as fuck, you got no job and I know you don't sell..
This walking contradiction is a MONEYMAKER? What the hell?
Thats a bit better, name flip, sucks that i had to read so long for you to start swinging at him. Woulda topped it off nice to tie it in to a strwburst commercial lol.
Your age alone means your nothing major you fucking minor.
step in my world and get your ass ROBbed like mr. Riener.
I remember 14 years ago I fucked a bitch who looked like your mother.
Damn Money...I mean sonny..FUCK..I should've wore a rubber!
eh, decent closer, but tb completely honest, OVERPLAYED. Not anywhere close to where youre spitting now. how old is this?

MONEY

Ayo, watch this G get a L like he was wished good luck/
Moneymaker a noob but fuck with me and get ya tooth plucked/
Average opener, but that Good Luck pitch I've read multiple times already.
Ya coof crushed,brain matter splattered like a squashed fruit gush/
When I'm done you gone be in all black like you covered In soot son/
What is this "soot you speak of? Insults with nice rhymes... really thats it.
He aint the Grimm Reaper, hes the Grimm Raper son, hes a 41/
Year old pedophile tryna get wild on a child thats his only son/
Not sure what you mean here, your calling him a pedophile, 41 years old, and hes trying to get wild on his son? is his son YOU? and is that a flip or a self insult lol
Everytime Grimm arrive the elderly laugh n kids scream stranger danger/
Grim the type of sick fuck to stick his one-inch dick up in a baby's manger/
thats just wrong. But ill take it.
I'm gonna leave Grim flatlined incritical condintion/
Incorperate-it into a fast rhyme to extradite his physical extinction/
lyrically amputate this G's "prick" like hes infested with gane green and syphillis/
Yea hes sick, got a disease destined for "death" he got in molester sector for "feeling kids"/
What is a molester sector? Eh, no real damage being brought to the table on your behalf money. The thing you did do better than him on was vocabulary. You just seemed more intelligent.

All in all, MVGT MONEY... In all honesty both lacked a battle front, flow was shaky on both, no real WHOA facters on either end. Money took my vote simply because he displayed a higher level of wording and rhyming.