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...Many questions in my head, as my thoughts occur
I have my eyes wide shut, Im seein dots n blurs
seein a teddy bear she cradles that he bought for her
I've lately got this aching feeling that I'm not for her
Really Dope Great Use Of Multi's
Lost for words im guessing what is lost is learned
now I try to wash the numbness as the faucet burns
In bed, I "toss and turn" ..similar to how a pizza's made
I'm fiendin for a fixture I should reach the blade..
Dope Vividry
It woulnt need tirades if I sat in silence tryna eat grenades
Should I be afraid? of the temptations that she displays?
Deceit, dismay, defeat, betrayed, all this in repeat then play
Holy Shit Nice Multi's
I would run my feet away until the streets would fade
Just to beat the pain.. Its hard to go but theres no ease to stay
Cool
Jealousy i see him in the greener shade of deeper jade,
I guess the fee's been paid, I suffer now for my actions then
You still have to spend cuz it's still your fault in an accident,
Decent
This is my cast and mend from what the past presents,
I can't act, pretend, or cover it up and mask the dents
My thoughts are just a track event, running till my back is bent
Lacking sense.. fuck it this is how I just get mad and vent
Great Closer
Overall This Is a Really Really Good Piece
It Never Flooped.
Great Job Looking forward to More'

appreciate the time to look through my piece guys thanks for the feed back

and for real the pic is cool lol

This shit was fucking ill, yo. You had a dope ass flow going, man. Stayed consistent with your content, and said it in an easily understood way. These bars were fucking fire, dude:

seein a teddy bear she cradles that he bought for her
I've lately got this aching feeling that I'm not for her
Lost for words im guessing what is lost is learned
now I try to wash the numbness as the faucet burns

And...

I guess the fee's been paid, I suffer now for my actions then
You still have to spend cuz it's still your fault in an accident,
This is my cast and mend from what the past presents,
I can't act, pretend, or cover it up and mask the dents
My thoughts are just a track event, running till my back is bent
Lacking sense.. fuck it this is how I just get mad and vent

This piece was dope, props bruh.