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Haz
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Post by Haz »

All You Newbs Get The Fuck Out This Thread
Atleast The Dood's With No Constructive Feed...

Overall This Was a Decent Script You Posted.
Some Nice Punches , Then Some Real Played Ones..
Some Cool Wordplay Some Forced Ones..
Multi's Were Good...

I Mean Everyone Did Pretty Straight If I Just Make It a Collab
DOn't Feel Like Votin..
What I Can Say K Killah..
Is Spit More Punches That Have Stings..
Keep Droppin.. Become Active!...
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TreTru
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Post by TreTru »

i'd say the flow and multi's were pretty good..
i think it'd probably make a nice audio track ..nice
to spit to....

i'd say haz is right ya just need to setup ya punchlines better
so the punch has a real deep meaning, as far as text drops go
i feel it was good..but i guess they expected a freakin mind blowin experience cuz it said best text battle on the net is all..
def keep droppin..1
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