no idea what cee4s talkin about, that definately aint an american accent,
anyway, at least uve got a foot in the door for recording, keep recordin and practicing, ur writing skills have been steadily gettin better, as far as recordin, get louder and more deliberate, maybe try memorizin your verse insteada readin it
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X and Viral said it best MH. you're young and new to this, the presence felt missing a little and it sounded like you were whispering into the mic. the lyrics were there for the most part and i didnt hear an american accent. it sounds like its you and your swag. keep it that way and use that to your advantage when you get more comfortable on the mic and things will come to you.

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i dunno i listened to the track again and the other 2 on the soundclick and there is definitly areas where u sound like your attempting to sound kinda american. u also had a line saying "the untited states is where i represent" in that Ill track. but anyway the freestyle track was better. you`ve probably elevated lyrically better than most people on this site considering it was basic as hell when u started.precise wrote:no idea what cee4s talkin about, that definately aint an american accent,
id say go for it more when your recording. like viral said you sound like your trying to keep the noise down lol.
keep at it


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aight thanks fo the feed Cee
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect
!!ILLEST MINDS!!
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
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For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect
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Yo I got to peep this one and well... the fact your trying to do this on your own tells me your pretty serious...so you'll get better eventually.
as for this track I think you gotta just bring more confidence to
what your saying..you gotta say it like you mean it...really beleive it..
I feel it's the difference between text-cee and audio mc's..you might wanna ride the beat a lil more..or like somebody said try memorizing the verse so you don't have to read it word for word..then youd be able to put more effort into the emotion and delivery of your lic's...in audio delivery is pretty much everything that an mc's can embelish on...the rest should fall in line..JMO ..bottomline...dont stop now keep rockin these and one day we can colab.
as for this track I think you gotta just bring more confidence to
what your saying..you gotta say it like you mean it...really beleive it..
I feel it's the difference between text-cee and audio mc's..you might wanna ride the beat a lil more..or like somebody said try memorizing the verse so you don't have to read it word for word..then youd be able to put more effort into the emotion and delivery of your lic's...in audio delivery is pretty much everything that an mc's can embelish on...the rest should fall in line..JMO ..bottomline...dont stop now keep rockin these and one day we can colab.
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kk Tre thanks fo tha feed
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect
!!ILLEST MINDS!!
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect
!!ILLEST MINDS!!

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