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ok startin off wit a lil sumtin fuck ihh

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4 real dis txy lets get dis goin
ill show dese kidz im legit
ihh goin get dissed by a new kid lol

yo ihh goin step 2 illest wen u don't understand
dat if our 9s dont kill u den our uzis can
aks under our beds like da boogie man
leave u six feet under like da sandman :!:

ima put an x on dere mass (xmas)and it aint marry
in da mirror your scared to say my name like its marys
leave you bloody when i appear pain will vairy
and leave dis world "with out you" like mariah carey :!:

come on in here and get bombed like osoma
ill hit you wit scary shit and leave trama
your so poor your hangin on yo moma
so ur b beggin for "change" like ya oboma :!:

listen up fame i kno about mob and its aight
but don't come around here lookin for a fight
bcuz our sick skillz will leave you ina fright
but tell me how can LIL BLAYZE go 9-0 on ur site?!!!????

just a lil freestyle off da dome
ill explain any of these lines if you need it
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Post by Miilz »

Hey This Not A Bad Drop, The Punches Were There. Could Be Improved But its All Good. The Flow i Caught Through Out Which Was good To! Did u Write to A Beat? If So What Beat. But Anyways, Keep On Dropping!
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Post by TXY »

no no beat just sat here and typed if ida had a beat ida had da flo better
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Post by Def-init »

Not bad.

"listen up fame i kno about mob and its aight
but don't come around here lookin for a fight
bcuz our sick skillz will leave you ina fright
but tell me how can LIL BLAYZE go 9-0 on ur site?!!!????"

My fav part of you drop!

It wasnt anything fancy. But you got the msg across IMHO. Keep them coming man.
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Post by Mac »

Not Too Bad. I Didn't Get Some Parts But I Think It Was More Because Of Your Typing That I Didn't Understand It. lol. I Think Your Punches Could Of Been Set Up An Executed A Little Better But There's always Room To Improve, Over all It Wasn't Horrible, Just Keep Droppin.

Try Writing More To Beats, It's Easier To Keep A Structure Going So Your Bars Add Up And Aren't All Over the Place.

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thanks for da feed
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Post by precise »

i dont find writing to a beat changes anything really

anyway, drops aright, i agree theres room to improve but ur at a good starting point, keep droppin uve got potential
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Yeah Well precise Your Canadian. lol j/p
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