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Post by -TraMaTiK- »

heres my new song,feat. PF on the hook[and i do some adlibs for it],leave some feed plz n thanks[and yes im aware theres some pops here n there but its not like ear bleeding]

http://soundclick.com/share?songid=6401993

[just noticed it cuts off at the end like 3seconds exact lol so nuthin 2 worry bout really]
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Post by Kurse »

Not too shabby...definately one of ur better tracks. Lyrically solid, and you ride the beat most of the time. I can tell when you flow...ur a lil too anticipated to spit ur lines, cuz you come in too early with them, which in turn, throws you off beat. You have to match ur lyrics and cue urself in according to the beat. Be patient...ur words aren't going anywhere. haha Take ur time.

Not bad...one of ur better ones. Good choice in beat...but definately keep up the practice.
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Post by complexity »

Kurse wrote:Not too shabby...definately one of ur better tracks. Lyrically solid, and you ride the beat most of the time. I can tell when you flow...ur a lil too anticipated to spit ur lines, cuz you come in too early with them, which in turn, throws you off beat. You have to match ur lyrics and cue urself in according to the beat. Be patient...ur words aren't going anywhere. haha Take ur time.

Not bad...one of ur better ones. Good choice in beat...but definately keep up the practice.
Could it be because he is reading?

Are you reading Tramatik?
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Post by -TraMaTiK- »

the only verse i read wuz the 3rd one,the rest i didnt,but that cud be why maybe i shud practice memorizing the whole thing n what goes where n shit,that might help too,but uppin 4 some more feed
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Post by Glamtrash »

Your best yet. You fell off in a couple places, but the beat was dope as fuck and for the most part, you rocked it. Keep at it kid.
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Post by Cee4 »

definitly my favourite track from you. loved the hook

but i got to say your voice sounds funny to me. maybe its just me because every track its sounds a bit funny but nobody else ever mentions it. you do sort of get used to it tho. i thought u were from New York but it dont sound like it when you rap. it just seems really slow on delivery and like your trying to sound different from how you would normally speak. that said your are improving on it track by track.

if you get the delivery sorted you`ll be good because your lyrics are decent and you come up with better concepts for songs than any other audio person on Illest.

keep droppin
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Cee4 wrote:definitly my favourite track from you. loved the hook

but i got to say your voice sounds funny to me. maybe its just me because every track its sounds a bit funny but nobody else ever mentions it. you do sort of get used to it tho. i thought u were from New York but it dont sound like it when you rap. it just seems really slow on delivery and like your trying to sound different from how you would normally speak. that said your are improving on it track by track.

if you get the delivery sorted you`ll be good because your lyrics are decent and you come up with better concepts for songs than any other audio person on Illest.

keep droppin
yea im from new york but i dont really gotta accent,and yea im tryna sound a lil different then i talk only 4 the purpose of tryna bring a new delivery for my flow n shit,but ill keep practicin it and keep droppin,thanks 4 the feed man
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and thanks 2 those who left feed b4 him as well
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Post by Omega Bill »

Liked this a lot.

Beat was tight, hook was on point, you changed up your delivery quite a bit. Liked the new flow and delivery, it doesn't sound like spoken word anymore. More emotion put into it, and your delievery is most noitcably changed in your voice pitch.

Good shit, stick with this kinda delievery.
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Post by Haz »

LOL Told U Make da Pitch Of ya Voice Higher!!!..
Dis Wus a Pretty Good Track Homie.. deffo One of ya Best
Da Hook wus Tight


you come up with better concepts for songs than any other audio person on Illest.
^ Dat is True As Fuck , i Cant Fuck Wid U When it Comes To Concepts like u Cant see Me wid Battling lol
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Post by HKX »

yo i like da beat on da track i agree wit Kurse tho u gotta be a lil patient on ur shit dawg but overall it sounds good not bad nigga keep it up dawg jus keep on practicin and you'll be straight
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Post by Young K »

as everyone else said the beat was dope...
i always read your lyrics on your page and there always straight...
i'm really liking the chorus...haven't heard a hook like this in a minute...
if i had to say something about your flow, i would tell you to switch it up constantly in this dont limit yourself to one way a flowing, kinda gets boring if your not interested in the song...
but your very original, i think you got a lot of potential, plus your one of my favorite audio heads on illest...
im in the same boat as you with this music shit, so if you need some feed/advice or want to collab dont hesitate to hit me up...

just keep doing your thing and keep elevatin'
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Post by PIRATEPRODUCTIONS »

nice work man just keep doin wat u do
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