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So Fly N' Fresh

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crew Name: So Fly N'Fresh

CREW'S HOT so now DUDE'S FEAR US! Im like GOD'S JESUS
coz got FEW HEATER'S! so see I own-y'all talk back ya dome's-off
so you'll DIE n' REST! plus we coming in 'FLY n' FRESH' like 'NEW SNEAKER'S'!!!
Our SWAG? IT'S ENDLESS while y'all FAG'S IS RESTLESS we bring that
anger FLIP, PATIENCE coz we bombing-rapper's while y'all is 'calming-actors'
Like 'SHIT AGENTS'!!! Our Flow aint no River, its a FLOOD, DUMMY! we so HOOD, SONNY
what you FEELING IS PAIN coz 'KILLING'S A GAME' Like 'BLOOD MONEY'!!!(HitmAn ohh!)
See which DOME'S OUR NEXT MURK? coz we BALL n' SPRAY ROUNDS but
y'all FALL n' PRAY NOW coz See We OWN THIS TEXT TURF!!!
and y'all is PRONE TO GET MURKED! Now dude's is aimed in the RATTLING DIRECTION
iF this FAGGIT A MENTION battling us? Y'all is BATTLING PERFECTION!!!
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damn

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that was fire
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Post by Bobby Star »

thanks for the feed but a little more explained would be nice !
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Post by Arvincible »

aight hoolio ill give it to u here, nice flow man i really caught it, but to be honest its really hard to read because of the structure, like the punch comes in the middle of the next bar...u know what i mean?

let the punch end the bar and itll hit harder...
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Post by Arvincible »

other than that its a good short piece with decent multis
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ThaNKS man ...
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Post by Subsist »

your inners in the first part of the verse was a bit confusing didnt flow so well, the rest of the piece flowed fine. i liked the blood money line. everything else was fine. nothing special. good piece. keep dropping.
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Post by Bobby Star »

Thanks for the Feed back !
SOMETHING WE ALL ADORE, SOMETHING WERE DYING FOR, NUTHING BUT PAIN, STUCK IN THIS GAME, SEARCHIN FOR FORTUNE AND FAME! -2PAC
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