Street Joint : Dangerous Shit

[Brah-Vo]

New Track ..
Put Togetha quickly.
Dedicated To U Fuckaz That Piss the shit Outta Me .. Lol

Wrote it Today Afta Some Olda niggaz decided to bully me 'round Coz i was younger.
This 4 U Guys.

btw: bEFORE ANY OF YA`LL CALL ME A BITER,
i admit i took one of TGYH's Lines from one of his collabos with Gutta .
I used the FLip u back like a camera phone line.
I know it's considered biting, but i couldnt think of anything that rhymed with capone and made sense.


ANYWAY:
Enjoy the track.

[Haz]

i Just Dont Think u Got The Voice Fa Rappin Man
But i'll Leave U Feed ina Lil im in Skool i hurd da trac Dough

[thaphantom]

Who beat dis is...da beat is hot...You hear it when u gettin louder...u got a nice flow...just the hearin ur breath is worse on this track...ur loud enough though homie...it was pretty nice...i fell for it cause da beat.... so my opinion it coulda been better but it's still ill

[-TraMaTiK-]

ok b4 i even listen 2 this,DONT EVER use someone else's shit again[as in line or bar n whatever]or else i wont leave u feed again,if u cudnt think of somethin u shudda scraped the whole bar n thought of somethin new..newaayzz,beat wuz cool,ur flow seems 2 be gettin better but it sounded like u were still kinda off n on beat at times,better then the last track tho,and dawg..lol dont spit into the mic or get so close cuz the words with the 'p' and 's' and 't' and certain words make it static like krazy cuz ur spittin so close so back up[exactly the reason why u shud getta pop filter] newayz it wuz ok,seemed like u tried doin double ups too if im not mistaken.idk 2 much bout it i only tried it a few times its notta hard concept 2 do @all but u gotta mix it right n whatnot..but id give it a 6/10 ur improving but keep droppin

[complexity]

i Just Dont Think u Got The Voice Fa Rappin Man
But i'll Leave U Feed ina Lil im in Skool i hurd da trac Dough

That comment should be deleted.

The entire point of this forum is to use constructive criticism to become a better emcee.

Your voice isn't changing, so people can give you hints how to best optimize your voice. How to use your vocal chords to their best potential.

The idea, that, he doesn't have the voice to rap is retarded.

Some of your favorite emcees had horrible voices when they started rapping.

Nas, pre-illmatic was ridiculous.

Eminem was unbearable.

[MesaR]

thought this was clean much better then your first audio song imo

[Cee4]

this was nice Raiza. a big improvement on your first effort which was good for a debut. i think your voice sounds alrite. people gotta remember you are still young and your voice will change as u get older. the biting the rhyme is a big no no. like tramtik said if u cant think of something to rhyme with it then just scrap at. like i said before i would say presence wise u are already better than a lot of audio dudes on here. keep it up

[Brah-Vo]

iight. Good Lookin Out on the feed dudes.
Sorry for biting the Line.
I'll scrap it next time.

UPPING

[Omega Bill]

Your voice is fine for rap. Ever heard E-40? That guy has the weirdest voice ever and he does it. Your voice is straight.

Song was alright. Got prescense to your shit, get a pop filter. Shits good, an like everyone else said just back away a little bit away from the mic cause it seems like you get real into it when you start swearing and you get real close to the mic, lol.

Keep droppin homie.

[Subsist]

He sounded fine. His flow is very very good for an audio beginner. He has a good grasp of rap rythm. All i suggest is saving up some money get a real mic and a good video card, or spend time at the studio.

[Brah-Vo]

Thanks for the feed subsist and bill!

Upping

[Haz]

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[Cee4]

haz i wanna hear ya audio. post one up

[thaphantom]

Haz man u talk all this big man ish bout audio's post one up.....[no hate]

[drunken jesus]

for a 12 year old chinaman not bad at all, you gotta better voice than alotta people here just get a flow down and make sure your doubles are layered right