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Bullets And GunSmoke (Raiza Debut Track)

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Post by Cee4 »

this was good for your first audio. all the gun talks not really believable but its all good lol. u did have a good flow and presence on the mic. most people tend to just rap really quick and with no emotion and u dont know what the fuck their saying but u kept it slower and this makes it better in my opinion. obviously the lyrical content could be improved but this was good for ur first drop. keep dropping coz in my opinion u are already better than a couple of audio rappers on here. braaaaaaaaaat braaaaaaaat lol
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Post by -TraMaTiK- »

raiza..my man from down under lool got it on now..im not gonna repeat everything everyone else said cause thats useless,newayz u definetly got that enthusiasm behind ur words which iz great 4 a first audio,glad u tried it too,lets see here..personally i dont think u shud use that slow of a beat cuz it seems 2 methat ur more of a upbeat kinda rapper not spittin on slow shit if u kno what i mean..kinda like me sometimes which iz cool man..lol@the sock thing trust me WE'VE ALLLLLLL been there lmao..last thing i wanna say iz if and when u do getta new mic,practice practice practice practicee!,when u go 2 get behind that mic i want u 2 be able 2 kno everything by heart if not,most of it then,realize where ur 'breathing spots' are inbetween words and make sure ur not soundin plain,keep droppin man it wasnt 2 bad,i didnt shut it off due 2 the fact it deserves a listen since ur notta asshole lool keep droppin son and buy a new mic,peace
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Post by Kurse »

Definately better than I anticipated it to be...especially since it was a debut track. but yea...definately invest in a better mic or sumthin cause that whole "sock over the mic" is an Ol' wives tale...that shit really doesn't work. I mean it does to a point...but it's NOT going to be a noticable differene on ur track to the point where you'd be like, "Damn guys...thank God we had the sock!"

But not shabby mayne...keep workin on it and drop moreeeeeeeee. I'm sure I'm not the only one who'd like to watch you elevate.
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Post by Viral »

u never leave me audio feed...but since i aint a dick like dat..ill leave some...

vocal quality...baaaad...understandable...but baaad..u def need a pop filter for ur mic.....and stand farther back...it sounded like it was in ur mouth at times...lol....that..and u seemed off beat a good amount of times....n its obvious ur readin off sometin...as long as u work on..flow, presentation, swagger which u seem to have but its really ehhhhhhhhh....and get a better mic wit a pop filter..ull get better...overall...it was ok...for ur first
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Post by ~Symbolikull~ »

mos def was better than i expected, quality will get better wit practice, you have potential here man... good shit keep droppin
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Post by *.HarleQuin.* »

deffo need a better mic if ur gonna do audio, i dont wanna hear ur heavy ass breathin in between verses lol
this track was good for a first try but ive heard ladysam do a better track than this on her first try and im sure her mic wasnt made for audio either lol so keep working on it, better lyrics and delivery and stay on beat
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