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u aint shit.... so u copd a grill
dont worry about a driveby, i stop to kill
watch my skill, i dream about a Mill-ions
so i cough up hits that fill-lungs, rap is wut i do-son
so ill whip out a big-gun, i feel like lil-pun
spittin out real-tongue

im sittin large i move pounds-a-day, ur small time movin mounds-of-hay
im rollin wit trend-setters, stay smokin on tenth-letters
your faggit ass exposin more names than end-credits
we benz-getters, step up & get ya head-severed
im a boss, mask down like V from Vendetta
i love the beef ill debt-it, u hover the street n forget-it

my name is-neglected, who r u to say that you've been dis-respected
accept-it, you've got more shit in ur pad then a 'septic'
'the shit' gets hectic when u start to reflect-it
ill leagalize 'crap' if i evr get ellected, but for now u gotta be selective
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good looks on the feedbak
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Post by complexity »

You have plenty of room for improvement.

"u aint shit.... so u copd a grill
dont worry about a driveby, i stop to kill "

Dope line.

The middle set of bars had a couple decent thoughts, but they weren't executed correctly.

And I don't know what the hell you were trying to say with the last set of bars.
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