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[Blockstar]

its da kid blockstar and my presence is known
i keep a clip on my hip and it aint 4 my fone
i aint talkin small money my paper is grown
like good d in a 2-3 yea da pressure is on

look da kid paper long sumpthin like posterboards
ice on my neck dun froze my vocal cords
i gotta rep for my city detroit wats good
but when its rainin outside iz da only time u in da hood

if a nigga diss my homies im lettin it blast
countin money unda da desk like im textin in class
cuz i make it rain like a saturated cloud
but'll leave his brains on his sharpie now he thinkin out loud

i got exclusive ice u see wut da eskimos did
cuz these weak niggaz stay wit no heat like a eskimo kid
im icy so please dont hate on me
wrist so froze kristy yamaguchi skate on me

WUT yall THINK?

[Haz]

Its Pretty Strait.. Not Bad..

ice on my neck dun froze my vocal cords

[-TraMaTiK-]

u gotta ok structure,nuthin id quote tho..pretty basic rhyme scheme..its ok,nuthin special,keep droppin tho

[Omega Bill]

Where at in Detroit? You reppin from Martin Luther King blvd and Rosa Parks? lol

This was an alright drop, basic stuff, kind unoriginal fitting the whole gangsta stereotype but it wasnt bad.

[Blockstar]

u fried im from 7 mile and livernois lil buddy
stop it

[~Symbolikull~]

another mutha fucka from michigan, bout damn time...

[Arvincible]

Im not sure if this structure will survive in a battle, but it keeps the flow good and the message sent in your drop.
yup yup keep it comin...

[Omega Bill]

I grew up not far outside of D. I grew up in Lincoln Park, you prolly know where it's at

[M.O.B]

aint nothin these dudes didnt already say





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[complexity]

"categorize this under, to dumbed down for plex"