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http://soundclick.com/share?songid=6161779
here u go,quit ur bitchin now
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Post by drunken jesus »

not just shitting on you or anything but you shouldn'tve posted this

your lyrics are pretty good as i've said before but you don't have a strong delivery/flow at all so posting an acapella track will sound 1000x as horrible as a track with a beat, i really wouldn't recommend mosta the creation chamber people to drop acapella, it just doesn't sound as good unless you have a really entertaining flow/delivery (tech n9ne, luda, etc.)

overall it just sounds like you talking when you're rapping doggy, like theirs no emphasis at all, try getting pretty wasted then recording, it probably won't sound a whole lot better at first but listen sober afterwards and listen to the emphasis cause most people tend to be louder drunk and that'll give you a clue as to how to better develop a better natural sounding presence, you need a more commanding presence when you rap (and no presence just doesn't mean louder) listen to how a rapper like ludacris or busta rhymes talks, then listen to them rap, it'd help to develop a better flow too but thats a lil harder to accomplish, i'll give you tips on that once you get a better presence
Respect this, specialist, black, testing this and get ya necklace jacked
Your after name scratched up off my guestlist, party freak
You the type of nigga that'll hardly speak unless you spoken to
You throw a cold screw but sober up when I'm approaching you
At the same time we postin two niggaz on that ass
Thats gonna do what they supposed to do the limelight
Snatched away from you because its my night
Killarm' blaze hotter than twilight, you better get ya lines right
Half of these crabs cant even rhyme right
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Post by -TraMaTiK- »

good looks DJ,and yea well i only dropped it cuz i wasnt about 2 be dropped on and not retailate..but yea i kno i gotta shit load 2 work on..guess thats why im here right
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Post by ~Symbolikull~ »

ima have to say this was written and then read the way you delivered it, wasnt bad lyrically though better than i thought, but in my eyes this was written, and this wasnt a battle post either dog....
i'll smack yuh with rage i force multis outta my ass to the page
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Post by Haz »

you've Gotten bettah From tha Last time i Hurd u on Track or Even Tha las Time Me & u Freestyled Back & Forth..
i Take it This wus Rushed Since Ghost Called u Out Not To long Ago He dissed u & u Replied Righ away So Itz Good

i Could Understand you The lyrics were Good homie its Just like i Told u Before you Needah Put More Emotion in your Voice lol Den you'll Be Strait.. its All good.. Hopefully u N Ghost Can Keep Sparrin Lyrically.. Do ya Thing...
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Post by Viral »

ummmm if u didnt do it acapella i think it woulda been alot better....u jst dont got the voice for it...and ur flow...well i didnt seem to really catch one...it was really slow and it was like u were whispering and/or making love to the mic....lol no hate tho...jst sayin wat i heard.....the vocal quality was shittay....could be improved alot....im not sure if it sounded written to me or not...i cant really say...but at times i thought it was because of the way u went about spittin it...and or...talking it...cuz i really thought u were jst talking at first...hahaa...anyways....keep droppin man...jst stay away from da acapellas...
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