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a lil somethin somethin

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ill have u chopped ona block, cropped ina sock, locked ina box strangled n dropped at a dock,half these rappers r propped ona cock, no mind of there own still hoppin on top, ride ur own wave, quit scramblin mine, ur ramblin lines make real artists wanna take matters to nines, n shatter ur spine wit an ice pick, splattered to find its a nice trick, i said dont bite bitch! or i mite pitch a grenade into ur pipe which...will leave u witout a tight grip, stumblin all night wit a flight stick, thinkin ur in da clouds...really ur ina hospital screamin out loud!!.......straight up retarded...


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Ya Flow Wus On Point.. i Liked The Multis..
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thanks for the feed back....ne more is welcome
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can i get some feeeed?
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Post by complexity »

"ur ramblin lines make real artists wanna take matters to nines, n shatter ur spine wit an ice pick, splattered to find its a nice trick, i said dont bite bitch! or i mite pitch a grenade into ur pipe which...will leave u witout a tight grip, "

This was my favorite part.

Not much to comment on because it was short, but I really liked that bar I quoted.

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it's Cool How ur Multis Just Come Out Like Puke Haha, So Unforced And Easy To Follow, That's What Makes ur Shit Flow So Well Too. im Not Gnna Comment On ur Structure Because it Doesn't Really Matter in a Short Piece Like This. i Like How u Just Randomly Kinda Make Up The Story as u Go Along, Well u Might Not Do That But it Seems That Way, i Can See The Eminem influence There Haha. Whole Thing Was Solid, Keep Droppin.
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