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..Tha Second Coming.. Ft. Da Professa

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Post by Momeijah »

Good For a Quick Drop. TGYH ur Verse Seemed Kinda Rushed And it Was Lacking On Hard Punches Like ur Previous Drops. Still u Had Flow, Multis And Structure And Those Kinda Verses Sound Great On Audio.


i'll Bite Tha Beast When i Fight Tha Sheet
When i Grab Tha Pen All i Write is Heat
End Up Tellin Tales "Of Mice And Men"
Dont Kno What Ta Write But My Hand Still Fights Tha Pen

Liked That 1st Half The Best^, Flowed Like a Charm. Just Try Not To Use Any Fillers, Aim For Loads Of Quotables. ur Last Line Was Pretty Sweet, Always Good To End The Verse With a Punchline. Like i Said Nothing Special Compared To Other Shit You've Dropped But u Didn't Write Some Wack Shit in This Either.

DaProfessa, ur Flow Was a Bit Stretched at Times, Like a Couple Less Syllables On ur Punches And it Would've Been Good. My Fav Line Was Definitely The Grove Street One, Probably The Best Punch in This Collab So ill Be Looking Forward To More Collabs With u And JJ Since ur Styles Work Together Especially ur Punchlines. Decent Wordplays in There, Nothing Spectacular But u Showed u Got Skill. Structure Was Kinda Fucked id Say, Maybe it Was The Way i Read it But id Work On it if it Wasn't intentional.

Good Job Both Of u. Like i Said Nothing Really Bad To Say About This But it Wasn't Mindblowing. Just a Walk in The Park Eh? lol
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Post by Cee4 »

good piece. it was a bit short but you both had dope punches.
as i said it was short so i cant really leave much feed. good work

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i'll Rush Tha Text And Clutch Tha Best
Shells Like a Mamogram They'll Touch Ya Chest

Aiigh Listen I Let My Tekken Blow Heat
Yall Know Everybody "C.J/See Jae Wit Green" like i'm Reppin Grove Street
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Post by RH1NO »

nice little collabo

tgyh when i caught the flow it was nice homie

professa i got the wordplay but was a little far fetched i think and destroyed ya flow with explanation
but was ok still felt a little hazard though nh, stick wit jj n youll elevate fo sho


nice job fellas
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Yuh Thnx Yall.. Incase u Didnt Understand Da Name Play Jae=My Name.. n Chea C.J Of San Adreas Obvious
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Post by complexity »

I agree with Rhino about the wordplay for prof. The last line was probably the best.

Hate came good with the flow, multis, but nothing to impressive.

A piece worth dropping though.
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