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Momeijah
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Post by Momeijah »

Probably The Best Drop ive Read From u. The Flow And Multis Stayed Good The Whole Way Through And u Didn't Go Off Topic. Plenty Of Quotables So ill List a Few.

How Can We Accommodate Tha Hate When We Fight For Peacce?
No Such Thing As A Bright Future Unless Lightning Strikes Tha Streets

is This A Dream Or Reality That We Fight And Walk Through?
is it A Man Or Myth That We Write And Talk To?

^Feeling This Bar The Most. Solid Piece Here, Touched On a Lot Of Subjects, Keep it Up.
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Post by Cee4 »

This was a good read. Like Domino said the multis and the flow stayed on point the whole way through.

my fav line-Kinda Sick But We Live in A Land Of Vicious Times
Only Tha Heart Can Defeat A Malicious Mind


i liked the last line too. Your gettin versaltile with your drops. Whether it`s some shoot em up shit or drops like this you are definitly elevating.
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Post by -TraMaTiK- »

really like this jj..bout time ya switched up ur styles lol..nice shit..flowed real nicely and the vocab was good...nice metas n shit..stay droppin..Peace
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Post by B-Bear »

I remember when u started droppin, all u talked bout was guns.. lol.. and look at this.. much better! gotta agree with dom on sayin this is the best i've read from u.. creative, nice use of multies... flow was straight, just an unconsistent structure played this one a bit down.. it was a few places where the flow sounded a lil bit choppy.. but a very nice drop man! keep it comin!
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Post by complexity »

I love the concept. Though it did lack a little bit of focus.

"is This A Dream Or Reality That We Fight And Walk Through?
is it A Man Or Myth That We Write And Talk To? "

Dom. Great minds think alike, this bar was outstanding.

The overall drop wasn't as consistent as it could have been.

"With A Brilliant Future Tha Youth Can Grow
Dont Let 'Em Be Sheletered Cuz Tha Truth is Cold
i See Tha Past And Look To Tha Future Where Tha Streets Are Evil
Teach Tha Children To Hold Hands And They Can Beat Tha Sequil
Kinda Sick But We Live in A Land Of Vicious Times
Only Tha Heart Can Defeat A Malicious Mind
There's A Reason Man Was Equiped With A Spine
Look At Tha Youngins Always Grippin Tha Lines "

Every other bar right there is good IMO.

You have elevated a lot, it would be cool as hell to see you do a really specific topic. I think you will get even more focused and drop even better.

Anyone notice people only leave feedback on one drop after they put one down? Cut that shit out.
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