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Post by Dead Silence »

a lil track i did coz i had a lto of shit going thru my mind at the time
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Post by Kurse »

Fam...
...I'ma be real wit you.
You don't know how to ride a beat.
And don't take as a nigga makin fun of you son...
...but you rap EXACTLY the same as Big P!
You don't follow the beat pattern. You don't follow the drums...
...not the hi-hats...not a snare.
Nothing.
I don't get it.
And your grammer...FUCK! Not that it's horrible...but spice it up a little. Use Bigger words.
Not bigger like this...
...but bigger as in complex. Sumthin with more substance.
Between the lack of stying in tune vocally with the music and the primative vocabulary that even a Geico caveman can understand...
...it sounds like somebody reading a Dr. Suess book over some fuckin instrumental.
With a slur.
Like I said...in no way shape or form am I picking on you...
...but if you're gonna elevate in anyway, you need to pin-point the problems. There are your problems.
So for the love of God.
Practice.
Fix them.
Cause shit like this makes my ears hurt and I think my goldfish died.
LISTEN to other artists...pay attention to how they rhyme certain words over certain particular parts of a beat.
Pay close attention. You'll see their not just spittin words...
...but vocally surfing the instrumental.
And don't be a fag...and just turn on music and say you listened to some songs.
Really listen. Pay attention to not the words meaning...but how and at-what point they say these words.
FUCK!
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Post by Dead Silence »

hahaha harshful but true im trying to get in the flow and shit like dat and i no wat u mean by the vocab and shit for a beat like this i should of upped tha vocab in it but shit i aint trying to do ne thing serous right now coz i aint working wit ne thing seriously and i mean im not like 20 sum odd years old like u and tha othas so i cant get a job wit good money and buy good quality shit like u guys can and all that so i aint really trying to be seriously and im only 15 so i got room to grow and i expect it to happen trust me in time i will.
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Post by complexity »

hahaha harshful but true im trying to get in the flow and shit like dat and i no wat u mean by the vocab and shit for a beat like this i should of upped tha vocab in it but shit i aint trying to do ne thing serous right now coz i aint working wit ne thing seriously and i mean im not like 20 sum odd years old like u and tha othas so i cant get a job wit good money and buy good quality shit like u guys can and all that so i aint really trying to be seriously and im only 15 so i got room to grow and i expect it to happen trust me in time i will.

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Post by MesaR »

i didnt mind this, i thought this was your best audio so far
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..Fuck that gay shit you say on a beat..
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Post by Dead Silence »

thanks for the feed
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Post by Gutta »

im only 15 too
I'll kill u dawg, lyrically or with tha ber-etta. its wut-eva//
cuz u kno i squeeze arms like I'm checkin my blood pressure//


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Curse the shots that left BIG and Pac lifeless
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Post by Gutta »

im only 15 too
I'll kill u dawg, lyrically or with tha ber-etta. its wut-eva//
cuz u kno i squeeze arms like I'm checkin my blood pressure//


Son I write with the trifeness
Engraved in Tyson
Curse the shots that left BIG and Pac lifeless
-Cormega-Verbal Graffiti
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Post by Gutta »

u sound like a southpark character or some shit
I'll kill u dawg, lyrically or with tha ber-etta. its wut-eva//
cuz u kno i squeeze arms like I'm checkin my blood pressure//


Son I write with the trifeness
Engraved in Tyson
Curse the shots that left BIG and Pac lifeless
-Cormega-Verbal Graffiti
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Post by Subsist »

He had emotion , something you dont have kurse....
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Post by Dead Silence »

yeah thats wat i was tryin to get in it is my emotion in it thats all i was worried about
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