Rhyme-a-Lime

Viral · Post by **Viral** » Tue Apr 03, 2007 3:30 am

I decided to write a random verse that rhymed...alot?....so here it is....leave some feed n ill return the favor...

viral will blaze the page n taze a mage wit ways to stage a murder,inraged to hurt her, traced n placed in space wit a helmet to distort ya face, an abortion race we stand for contorting fate, conforming rape to permission,these misinformed states need revision, incisions on prisons removin men who make decisions, take this mission for ur sake u listened, ill take the visions, while division is acted upon,smacked like a pawn these wack cats stay cracked wen i lay blades on the track, stay on ya back in my way u get smacked, infact the impact will distract the map leavin iraq jst a black tack smashed by the checks no republic above it 38 snub shoved in ur budget watchin ya plummet till ur stomach is inside out eatin ur intestines n throwin up from it, so to sum it, ive done it, run to the summit n rappel off like the rain is a comin,now prepare for tears cuz my brain is an onion!

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precise · Post by **precise** » Tue Apr 03, 2007 3:38 am

hahaha, nice piece, yup rhymes alot, thats my professional analysis bro lmao. creeeative

Viral · Post by **Viral** » Tue Apr 03, 2007 3:39 am

like hop-skotch n osh-kosh-bigosh...lol

precise · Post by **precise** » Tue Apr 03, 2007 3:41 am

n posh rosh n plot plosh closh mosh fosh too

Viral · Post by **Viral** » Tue Apr 03, 2007 3:43 am

lol wooooord! ok enough of this gibber jabber!...i pitty the fooooool!...

FEEEEEEEEEEDBACCCCK!

precise · Post by **precise** » Tue Apr 03, 2007 3:44 am

feedback like sheeefracks n fleeeracks too

B-Bear · Post by **B-Bear** » Tue Apr 03, 2007 7:09 am

i'd love to hear that on audio.. it would sound sick!

this is probably the most rhymes i've ever seen in a verse, shitloads of rhymes.. but it was really much of a babble in my opinion had some nice lines and some cool imagery in it as well.. keep it up..

RH1NO · Post by **RH1NO** » Tue Apr 03, 2007 7:17 am

now prepare for tears cuz my brain is an onion!

great closin lmao literally nice drop a little too much rhyming where some didnt make sense though it was funny nice drop

MesaR · Post by **MesaR** » Tue Apr 03, 2007 9:01 am

lol this was pritty cool i must say i liked it

drunken jesus · Post by **drunken jesus** » Tue Apr 03, 2007 7:05 pm

illness like pill spliffs and milf tits

~Symbolikull~ · Post by **~Symbolikull~** » Wed Apr 04, 2007 12:30 am

i liked this one viral, some of the middle seemed like babble but for the most part this was tight.

checks no republic above it 38 snub shoved in ur budget watchin ya plummet till ur stomach is inside out eatin ur intestines n throwin up from it, so to sum it, ive done it, run to the summit n rappel off like the rain is a comin,now prepare for tears cuz my brain is an onion!

^^^i liked the endin the most, big ups

Viral · Post by **Viral** » Sat Apr 07, 2007 4:10 am

lol thanks for the feed...yeah sym it was mostly babble...i was in a rhyming mood...hahaha...so i jst put watever really..haha

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