Uncontrollable Circumstances

[complexity]

Im staring at the galaxy thru fake glass
the human race is an erased past
computers create half life which is traced back
to satellites interacting with space crafts
the great blast killed most interactive life
while supernatural gas retracted light
until every continent was stacked with ice
mothers hide inside, children were sacrificed
that was the beginning of the intergalatic fight
Im the ninth wonder so pass the mic
as I asunder half the site up under
the earth plundered into the abyss
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[MesaR]

wasnt bad complexity, your flow and deliverly was good your vocab was outstanding like always some bits in it were abit choppy you could have worked on making this abit longer with more thought it would be a tone better..

it was still pritty nice complex, keep doing your thing..

[~*Blitz*~]

That was intresting, very random lol. Short yes and kind of sketchy? But a good read and worth it though it may leave you pondering some things lol.

Nice work complexity, I like how you can write about anything and pull it off.

[B-Bear]

a good idea def.. but it woulda been better if u'd written some more i guess.. should've deepened the topic

Im the ninth wonder so pass the mic

who's the eigth? haha.. thought there were only seven..

bu overall, a nice drop.. u had som good imagery in it tho, and u're vocab is always good.. feel ya flow was a bit inconsistent.. but the imagery did the piece.. keep em comin..

[16 Micz]

im the 8th ^

but pretty good..i dont think u put much effort into it..but the details and story(i guess a story) was pretty good...kept me reading...as well as the length..the vocab and rhyme scheme were ok...i've seen better, but wasnt bad at all...keep it up...like i told killah, it good to see some old faces return to the scriptures...

[Stina]

liked the multi's you were droppin .. specially in the beginning, got a little off flow but still it was pretty good ..