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[center]First off, thank you for reading this. I just wanna say that even tho the rhyme schemes are hella simple, I didn't wanna compromise the sound for less truth cuz this is definitely the rawest shit I ever wrote. Enjoy.

Seems like once you're at the top, it gets harder
So much pressure on yourself to go farther
Yeah I rap well, but I'm not Dwayne Carter
And my girl at the party is cute, but she could be hotter
Northwestern is good, but I want Harvard
Gotta study longer, gotta conquer
Love when people sleep, that's when I get smarter
30 mgs of Adderall and two Monsters
Grindin on every tooth until my jaw hurts
Catch me in Detroit, wearin' a Jimmy John's shirt
Taking orders like a bitch, but at least I got work
Poverty is like God' curse, I'm atheist
No wonder rich people always promoting God's words
A lot of people think that I got no honor
I've been doubted by my brother, mother and father
To the people at Pitzer: I swear I didn't rob her
And when I see the guy who did, I'm puttin' him on the curb
Kids at Pitzer are the reason I HATE GOSSIP
Thank God I'm not in trouble -- they let me withdraw first
Why do people hear things and assume the worst?
You almost ruined my entire life with a rumor
I hope that all of you people get tumors
I got two words: "Fuck You," wait no... "Die Sooner"
People always say, "Chris you got anxiety"
Maybe cuz every girl I've ever liked has lied to me
Maybe cuz poverty stops me from who I try to be
Maybe cuz I've always been different than our society
I used to think my whole life was hopeless
Do you know what it's like to be a homeless broke kid?
I've slept in half the parks from Seattle to Oakland
So I will never stop until my family grows rich
People love this Hip Hop because I spit raw
Example: when I was 19, I couldn't get my dick hard
No insurance, every doctor told me to get lost
Researched the treatment myself, now I can hit raw
Besides that, I got stomach bleedin'
And contracted a virus from the parks where I was sleepin'
Been through so much that I almost went off the deep end
My whole life is lost money, health problems, and girls cheatin'

Yo I love my friends, but they all talk shit
"Chris is sloppy as shit"
Or
"He's got a small dick"
"He'll never make it in life or with that hip hop shit"
Just WATCH my dreams come true - trust me, I got this
For the haters who thought Chris would not quit drugs
It's been a year and I haven't even popped thizz once
So I guess I'm sayin' you should stop it with that gossip
Cuz you'll just feel dumb when I hit the top quick
And nobody can diss me, I laugh at myself
You only put others down cuz ya mad at yourself
A month ago, I was fatter than hell
Bad for my health
So I hit the gym, now my muscles actually swell
The other day, I was at Mary Nash's crib
Relaxin' a bit with Ashton and Becca Lazarus
Then Ashton said some shit, made me wanna slap the bitch
That's it! We are NEVER friends - I've had it, kid
That's right, I said we're never friends
I don't understand why you're so negative
Maybe you're depressed, maybe you need medicine
Maybe you rely on boyfriends to fill your emptiness
Yo Lisa, I'm sorry for saying the victim was me
Denied my faults - only exposed what you did to me
That aside, you were still such a bitch to me
That any chance of our friendship is history
My dude Jeremy, thank you for understanding me
On the real, I trust you more than my family
If you ever get caught up and somethin' bad is happening
I promise you, I'll be the first one who's at the scene

I sound crazy, but I got a good heart inside
I just wrote this song to show you all my darker side
True that this music can help me through the hardest times
But there's still a monster inside that wants to die[/center]
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Raw I was feelin this especially with the brutal honesty you brought. A lot of shit you said was abrupt and that created a good vibe for me it was just like you laid all the cards out on the table. Good mix of positive and negative too how you jumped from dissing yourself in a way to talking yourself up. The only negative thing would be how I lost the flow a couple of times but it didn't take from the overall impact of the verses. Keep it up.

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Re: Monster

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This was a hella emotional piece man, loved it. Can't really say a bad word about it. It was raw, honest, kept my attention, you had good vocab and flow, and painted a really intricate picture, man, great job.


Please record? :P
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Thank you all for the feedback, I really appreciate it. Like Momeijah said, my flow needs to be worked out in some places, so I'm not quite ready to record it, but it definitely will be at some point. Thanks again.
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Nice man, this was dope... reminds me a bit of some of my work.

People always say, "Chris you got anxiety"
Maybe cuz every girl I've ever liked has lied to me
Maybe cuz poverty stops me from who I try to be
Maybe cuz I've always been different than our society

Favorite part...

Good shit, Keep droppin bro
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