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- Phasewon
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40 Bars of Death
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[Phasewon]
I'm sicker than an AIDS patient, I'll assault and beat your corpse
Spark a tiki torch, talk to ouija boards, and praise Satan
Take patience, or I'll leave you toothless, when I break your face in
Eight places, then beat you stupid just to see the bruises
What I think is ruthless, an evil genius, cut open a
Pregnant b*** to eat the fetus and drink the fluid leakin' through it
I'm fore warning yall/ ... I need an excuse
To tie this noose around your neck, and toss you off of the roof
And if it's loose, then you still got a four story fall
With red spatters, on the cement, when your head splatters
Every where I go, I leave a trail of dead rappers
Hear the Devil's messages when my record is sped backwards
Make you say my name, while I drain your main vein
With a razor blade stained with AIDS, 'til your brain aches in pain
Chain you from your ankles, have your throat strangled
Drive a steak through your heart, and break you apart, from both angles
Straight from the start; the most painful part's when your toes dangle
Shank you with razor sharp blades that are state of the art
Playin' a part in the six sequences of death
Step one- seep his breath, so it aint leakin' out his chest
Step two- cover the basement with plastic, placed on the rug
So when you cut his face with the hatchet, there aint a trace of his blood
Phase three is his life flashin' in fast foward
While the hack saw, wacks his neck, 'til his head's half off
Part four's a crash course, chop his hands and feet
Disconnect his jaw, slit his neck and all, snatch his teeth
And proceed to slice his body with a sword
So they can't I.D. his corpse, from the autopsy at the morgue
Chapter five, a lateral pull will shatter his skull
Batter a hole in his chest, reach in and capture his soul
And lesson six, after you slice and dice
Sell his soul to the Devil and sacrifice his life to Christ
For twice the price, a perfect murder... vanish without a trace
Off the face of the planet, the jakes aint searchin' further
Burst the burner, I'm sparkin' it often... burstin' it first
The worst of the worst, I'm a demon surfaced to earth
The walkin' abortion... at birth I was cursed
Driving to church in a hearse, to drop your body off in a coffin
Reducin' evolution and producin' death's conclusion
When I send you to your execution through electrocution
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[Phasewon]
I'm sicker than an AIDS patient, I'll assault and beat your corpse
Spark a tiki torch, talk to ouija boards, and praise Satan
Take patience, or I'll leave you toothless, when I break your face in
Eight places, then beat you stupid just to see the bruises
What I think is ruthless, an evil genius, cut open a
Pregnant b*** to eat the fetus and drink the fluid leakin' through it
I'm fore warning yall/ ... I need an excuse
To tie this noose around your neck, and toss you off of the roof
And if it's loose, then you still got a four story fall
With red spatters, on the cement, when your head splatters
Every where I go, I leave a trail of dead rappers
Hear the Devil's messages when my record is sped backwards
Make you say my name, while I drain your main vein
With a razor blade stained with AIDS, 'til your brain aches in pain
Chain you from your ankles, have your throat strangled
Drive a steak through your heart, and break you apart, from both angles
Straight from the start; the most painful part's when your toes dangle
Shank you with razor sharp blades that are state of the art
Playin' a part in the six sequences of death
Step one- seep his breath, so it aint leakin' out his chest
Step two- cover the basement with plastic, placed on the rug
So when you cut his face with the hatchet, there aint a trace of his blood
Phase three is his life flashin' in fast foward
While the hack saw, wacks his neck, 'til his head's half off
Part four's a crash course, chop his hands and feet
Disconnect his jaw, slit his neck and all, snatch his teeth
And proceed to slice his body with a sword
So they can't I.D. his corpse, from the autopsy at the morgue
Chapter five, a lateral pull will shatter his skull
Batter a hole in his chest, reach in and capture his soul
And lesson six, after you slice and dice
Sell his soul to the Devil and sacrifice his life to Christ
For twice the price, a perfect murder... vanish without a trace
Off the face of the planet, the jakes aint searchin' further
Burst the burner, I'm sparkin' it often... burstin' it first
The worst of the worst, I'm a demon surfaced to earth
The walkin' abortion... at birth I was cursed
Driving to church in a hearse, to drop your body off in a coffin
Reducin' evolution and producin' death's conclusion
When I send you to your execution through electrocution
[video]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=t4YvEjWqlRc[/video]
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Re: 40 Bars of Death
raw
i liked how this sound plus the lil effects u had in
make it better. vivid brutal imagery and str8 flow and delivery
dope shit keep em coming
-- Sat May 05, 2012 6:22 pm --
def adding to the story telling of mass genocide of innocent bystanders
i liked how this sound plus the lil effects u had in
make it better. vivid brutal imagery and str8 flow and delivery
dope shit keep em coming
-- Sat May 05, 2012 6:22 pm --
my fav lines this shit went hard i like the step by step killin shit you didStep one- seep his breath, so it aint leakin' out his chest
Step two- cover the basement with plastic, placed on the rug
So when you cut his face with the hatchet, there aint a trace of his blood
Phase three is his life flashin' in fast foward
While the hack saw, wacks his neck, 'til his head's half off
Part four's a crash course, chop his hands and feet
Disconnect his jaw, slit his neck and all, snatch his teeth
And proceed to slice his body with a sword
So they can't I.D. his corpse, from the autopsy at the morgue
Chapter five, a lateral pull will shatter his skull
Batter a hole in his chest, reach in and capture his soul
And lesson six, after you slice and dice
Sell his soul to the Devil and sacrifice his life to Christ
def adding to the story telling of mass genocide of innocent bystanders
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- cyanidesyn
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Re: 40 Bars of Death
2 me this is sum old eminem type shit or even tyler the creator not my type of music anymore hardcore gangster rap is dead nice drop im jus not feelin it
Re: 40 Bars of Death
You know how I feel about this ...
Sorry my comment got deleted.
I think you an I are different ends of the spectrum concept-wise but I appreciate what you do ... The recordings you squeeze out of your voice continue to impress me cause I've done baritone songs and it's tough to pull off with a modern instrumental slammed into the ceilings.
The multis are sick ,, the imagery is excellent ... and you can hold an idea for more than one bar ... which a lot of cats seems incapable of doing.
A lot of people dig the shock horror vibe ... I spent a minute with it ... but for me ... it's like putting up a shield of insanity to protect those fleshy tender bits inside that don't wanna be exposed yet ...
Makin' a personal song about being a victim ... which we all are at some point or another ... now ... that's scary shit
Sorry my comment got deleted.
I think you an I are different ends of the spectrum concept-wise but I appreciate what you do ... The recordings you squeeze out of your voice continue to impress me cause I've done baritone songs and it's tough to pull off with a modern instrumental slammed into the ceilings.
The multis are sick ,, the imagery is excellent ... and you can hold an idea for more than one bar ... which a lot of cats seems incapable of doing.
A lot of people dig the shock horror vibe ... I spent a minute with it ... but for me ... it's like putting up a shield of insanity to protect those fleshy tender bits inside that don't wanna be exposed yet ...
Makin' a personal song about being a victim ... which we all are at some point or another ... now ... that's scary shit
- Phasewon
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Re: 40 Bars of Death
Thanks for the feedback y'all, being compared to old Eminem isn't an insult, if it's not your cup of tea then it is what it is, but "old Eminem" is praised as one of the greatest lyricists of all time, so I'll take the comparison as a compliment.
And Cyan I def feel you, I appreciate the constructive crit', I have far more diverse concepts other than horrorcore in the holster, to kick start my legitimacy as a lyrical mc I'm getting strictly lyrical shit out of the way first with a mixtape in the works, my actual album will deal with far greater concepts than just multis galore, but for now, I'm flexin' the skill!
And Cyan I def feel you, I appreciate the constructive crit', I have far more diverse concepts other than horrorcore in the holster, to kick start my legitimacy as a lyrical mc I'm getting strictly lyrical shit out of the way first with a mixtape in the works, my actual album will deal with far greater concepts than just multis galore, but for now, I'm flexin' the skill!
[video]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=t4YvEjWqlRc[/video]
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Re: 40 Bars of Death
wasnt meant 2 b an insult bro
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Re: 40 Bars of Death
Fuck whatever break down I would give you, fuck a criticism, I felt as though you did a beautiful job unleashing the chaos on this track. I deal in horror, and this shit was fully representative of the sickness of it's mastery. All I can say for sure is that you ripped this shit a few new assholes, respect my dude.
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[center]Illest Awards For 2011:
Text MC of the Year- MonuMental
Class of 2011- MonuMental, Enlightend, 3rd String, CBK, and Pest
Writer of the Year- MonuMental
Written of the Year- MonuMental 'A Series of Unfortunate Events'[/center]
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Re: 40 Bars of Death
This is actually my type of lyricism. It might not sell in the mainstream, but its definitely entertaining.
I'd listen to a whole album of this.
I'd listen to a whole album of this.
Re: 40 Bars of Death
I know man, I actually put this on my ipod when he first posted it. This song is nice, each song you make tops the song you made before. Still my ONLY thing is, I feel you could still try improving your delivery. You certainly got the lyrics, but with the same delivery I'm sure it might get some what boring within time.....complexity wrote:This is actually my type of lyricism. It might not sell in the mainstream, but its definitely entertaining.
I'd listen to a whole album of this.
Shiiiit or maybe not boring, but predictable delivery wise. Keep on dropping man, this was dope as hell.
Re: 40 Bars of Death
Fuck yeah, this is sick the flow and structure and flow is dope, i like writting like this to, i didn't like the effects on the vocals to much, but still raw as fuck, keep it up
..Fuck that gay shit you say on a beat..
- Phasewon
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Re: 40 Bars of Death
'preciate the feed! Shiiit every song I post on soundclick gets at least in the top 30-50 on the charts, I think it's because of y'all, thanks for listening.
[video]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=t4YvEjWqlRc[/video]
Re: 40 Bars of Death
Wow. This is nasty. Really dope. Your lines are very creative and the voice gives the song a creepy feeling. Great job on this.
- Phasewon
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Re: 40 Bars of Death
^preciate it! I'll return the feed asap.
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Re: 40 Bars of Death
uh...! so fuckin raunchy dawg, soooo fuckin raunchy. imma play this next time im rollin deep finna bust on a nigga! haha those chapters hella got me, you executed a great idea with that one man. dope beat too man, i was writing this while listening and i got pretty sad just now when it ended haha. keep up the good shit
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