im new and would like some pointers please

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Posted By Evolution

this seems to be an interesting battle off the high kicks
but cant test this sniper rifle 50 cal

as aim threw the sights n start shooting at peoples rhymes
that the devil himself is now fearing for his own life

cause the dark side off evolution has risen from the grave
now its time to embrace the creator off death its self
you talk about truth but all i see is bull of the fairy tail rhyme

like a fantasy world off the AI Facebook integrity
look at his life am about to become the man off his wife
Facebook status YEAH LIKE

im not old skewl but id thought id drop a few as am not a veteran cat
but saying that i like to bite back


i must have gone blind while i was reading this shit
cause the flames you reckon you spit evan the
sun light is struggling to ignite it


your all on about sucking each others dicks
whats this A FUCKING HOMO SHOW its not
realistic

then you call your selfs texties
all i see when i read thru these wanna be mcs
they call this a breeze all i see is the ZZZZZZZZ

when i spit ma rhymes ya better run n hide
cause the grim reaper is about to play with ya
life while evolution is invading your mind



ive seen so many things in ma life
ive seen so many people willing to sacrifice
for a dream but the world just seem to wanna
criticize that its got him thinking about
suacide he cant controll his own mind
its like he got a shadow off a storm casted
over him but yet he still gets on the stage
n m.cs till his heart starts to bleed tears
rollin from his eyes its like he,s gone lyricly
mentally from the people off society
evolution is the key and not a broken destiny


there's some thin seriously lyrically wrong with the
way you see brain surgery that id even put you in my ps2
while i light up ma green and watch you do your magic
as you crash and burn your own demo version off this industrea

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you doin alright i say keep it more live you need to pull people in with some more cleverness here and there but ey i feel some passion towards the end if u really feelin that then good let it all out man no holding back