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I NEED A FUCKING MICROPHOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOONE
then get one dude
I PLAN ON IT, BUT I WASNT TALKING TO NE1 BUT MYSELF.
u were talking to yourself?
YES
whats that called?
BEAUTIFUL SOLILOQUY,using my quills, that sort of speak.unique a beating seeder for weeks until i her see. nerds see you saw i am your leader, seat ur song on a sea saw thats where it belongs. be long in ur speak be long until u b wrong. I DING THE GONG, COME LISTEN TO ME SING A SONG, a sacred psalm, gypsie please read me my palm. no i didnt ask you to spit in my hand, but i accpreiate the swimming pool u meant in my land. travel the rodeo where theres really more muggles then the wiz train. wait what? wizzle wizain. this is where i proceed to laugh at ur lack of wiz pain. my brain , you see, let me just down to earth. i can speak to earthling if u really think its worth. but i decided to venture further to the ether. i am only here to let you know, and not bring you with me either. purple acidic was this is what im gargling. farming the long goners by the tail led by there father. i could say you see, but id only be pretending, lets pitch a tent and venture into eachothers membranes. membrane? you mean that insane inside men thing? menacing calvin slinging pebble shrink. so to think, there is no other drinks, then intoxicating liquid is my buisness. cunning cunt singer cutting cutlets by the couple. uh oh oh noe jimmys a problem uh oh oh noe jimmys a problem. as i blow a bubbles behind ms. ruddle in the summer. the carful , variable limitless palimpsest listening to u and what your kids think. the cloak up in the midnight, a joke ok you seem fright. but for just tonight , pretend ur a alpha dude, right. cindy let your hair down, and ill inspect your rectum. then inject your neck with venemous necta. this is the reason i havnt girlfriend since november. but im just pretending patty she was in the mo -*CENSERED* . will u just got a little trip out of the box, whoever is reading this and decides not to talk. anyway, i slipped a disk riskin my newphew; on a game of i betcha u cant guess who. As a child imbued , with suess and charleston chew, charming ensues. charfing, imbarking a noose. its news to you and to me also, that if u follow ne1 but urself ull end up have to swallow. A swollen pick axe i borrowed. but tomorow, ill saw a sorry actin farve hoe. Fargo, er tho farthur then ur varsity farm team. use your imagination to imagine a imagined nation. natives persuaded into bacon masturbation. leaderleaderleader no there not such a thing. only one to show the people what they see. lingo is a tango let go of your shingle, dingo. begin to climb the rope i made from xploding nades, yo. my dance is a whirling nado, yupyup kratos he said so. fairy tails. berry trials. im burried in this very tale. tale of a taylor not a taylor but a taler. tatior tots betrayed my thoughts i thought i taught u dauntly. now im haunting eric everytime he song sings. 123.124.1245 hit the floor. u want more? are u bored? cmon lets hit some stores. Where merchandise can intice liking, finding ur a blind sheep. when u discover the knife was really phsyic. now you have this physic shiny metal sharp thing as a side kick. a side kick, siding to the side i find ur eyes pick.

i wrote this in around 90bpm rythme..u can read it like a book if u want.some instrumentals i used to make text with:

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_RnhFPh51JY

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LOJD3cYm6NI

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=vcxfQFE-QjE

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=CymDoJonSTg

im done for now....not going to bother edit now...this hasnt scratched my notebook...:twisted: :lol:
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sorry about the lack of feed but this drops jacked up sonny.

Fix ya structure. Refrain from chatter and get on wit tha lyrics. This is aint bad and some parts were decent but overall it was a headache.
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This wass pretty nice. i enjoyed reading. But yes, fix your structure and it'll read soo much better. But this was good. Liked the vocab and content especially.
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I like it.

The structure didn't bother me much,
I just read it like a book, as you had said.

Bacon Masturbation.

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Im high as fuck.....and this shit is funny....I cant tell if hes serious...or just joking...either way this is some classic shit mayne....if he wrote this...THIS SHIT RIGHT HERE.....before The Message....people would be going wild and shit ssssson.....stamp of approval from me brah...keep it 1548692 times real ssssson

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QwarterZ wrote:Im high as fuck.....and this shit is funny....I cant tell if hes serious...or just joking...either way this is some classic shit mayne....if he wrote this...THIS SHIT RIGHT HERE.....before The Message....people would be going wild and shit ssssson.....stamp of approval from me brah...keep it 1548692 times real ssssson

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lol O.O
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