I used to do this shit..

[Felon]

My lifes moved in different stages..
I gotta make a new chapter in my life and pick the pages
I gotta fix my brain with a new attitude..
Take the right direction..a different latitude
Im not mad at you..im mad at myself..
Its like im standing in hell..everything im planning has failed
Like going back into jail..that aint my idea of life
And now ive realized that shit.. my minds clear of crime
Live my mirrored life..a legit lifestyle..
Cus the bad in me's dissapeared by miles
I got my own digits to dial.. my own property
Dont have to walk the streets for a little robbery
Cus it now bothers me what the victim goes through
When you walk up to them hooded and they dont know you
And you go through there pockets n take what they got
Fix up..is it worth it.. are you making a lot?
Are you raising ya pot? take advice and get a cash flow
Maybe a job?? ...where you get money in the bank bro
And stack doe...the honest way
Set ya sights on a better life.. not a robbers way...

[AntiMaTTer]

My lifes moved in different stages..
I gotta make a new chapter in my life and pick the pages
I gotta fix my brain with a new attitude..
Take the right direction..a different latitude
Im not mad at you..im mad at myself..
Its like im standing in hell..everything im planning has failed
everything was solid up to "Myself/Failed" that shit was just mad forced... the multis prior to that was str8. Good flow


Like going back into jail..that aint my idea of life
And now ive realized that shit.. my minds clear of crime
Live my mirrored life..a legit lifestyle..
Cus the bad in me's dissapeared by miles
I got my own digits to dial.. my own property
Dont have to walk the streets for a little robbery
keepin up with the multis sorta, switched more to an audio flow here
but this is solid

Cus it now bothers me what the victim goes through
When you walk up to them hooded and they dont know you
And you go through there pockets n take what they got
Fix up..is it worth it.. are you making a lot?
Are you raising ya pot? take advice and get a cash flow
Maybe a job?? ...where you get money in the bank bro
And stack doe...the honest way
Set ya sights on a better life.. not a robbers way.

good message with solid rhymes. Had few rough patchs but shit was pretty smooth thru and thru. stick around, youll elevate more.

[Felon]

Yes yes..thanks for the feedback..im in the process of writing another verse and then thinking of a hook..ima change a few lines there anyway when i hit the studio! Safe

[QwarterZ]

This one was actually better then the other one
it wasn't too bad...it was just a decent point of lyricism
the concept your using is kinda bugging me yet..but what the hell
you did your thing on this one...this one had flow that rode nicely
and had a bit more emotion...although some parts seem questionable
by questionable I mean the way you phrased it and jumped off into a different concept
either way nice drop my friend