Just shakin some dust off...
There was a time that I thought that I would never make it/
That the scales were too corrupt to ever measure greatness/
Wished for better days, wished to be forever weightless/
So I could rise faster, the effort seems to tests your patience/
Tryin to seperate shit, tryin to filter out the bad and worst/
Tryin to crack my way in, hopin that this hammer works/
Battered nerves make me have an urge to tip the liquor back/
And I figured that it would translate into some sicker raps/
But my picture's black, my future is undeveloped/
I got a dream, but its gonna take months to sell it/
Haters runnin jealous, tryin to slow momentum/
But I got too much on my plate to ever go against em/
So I just ignore em now, got shit thats more important now/
Like wringin my soul until these fuckin flows are pourin out/
Aimin for Jordan's crown, but playin in another sport/
Paintin with the blood of war, but I act like this shit is such a chore/
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- MonuMental
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Not much to say about this piece. It's all there, rhyme wise and whatnot. Pretty nice expression of thoughts and all that. I feel ya on the shaking the dust off thing. Nice drop.
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Re: Try
not bad, i like the over all concept of it, it flowed well, multies were all solid, could of used more through out thou, but nice work respect.
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Nice drop. Solid flow. Great multi's. Some sick metaphors. Nice way to shake the rust off. Of course, I would like to see something more topical-like, but you did your thing on this piece. Good to see you back in the Written Section.
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