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Mac Miller Knock Knock [Freestyle]

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im chillin

good no villain

put me in the game you know im killin

always on the grind

everytime i rhyme

these niggas my prey but i aint talkin shrine

look how i go

ballin like micheal

hard in the paint yellin iso iso

spittin that pyro

hair like hydro

gettin money large while you on micro

im ballin you should let me coach you

the diamonds on my neck so blue

the riderz who everybody go to

they want beef but all they givin is tofu

damn so they must be vegetarians

swimin in the money like a nigga in aquariums

beatin up the beat i guess im a barbarian

swag is outer-space im on another planetarium

haa now im in motion

money knockin at my door you know i gotta open

i got cheese so i dont need a token

im goin HULK on the beat hogan

my money wet, you dry need lotion

got touched by a king im golden

tryin to get a buzz so everybody knows

im the MVP of the year derrick rose
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Re: Mac Miller Knock Knock [Freestyle]

Post by ippiki_17 »

Yes, I could hear this over a Mac Miller instrumental. I advise that you use some multi's and revise it a little bit, but that's just me. Just do you.
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Re: Mac Miller Knock Knock [Freestyle]

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iight thanks ill revise it right noww
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Re: Mac Miller Knock Knock [Freestyle]

Post by S3V3NTH1RTY »

I ain't trying to hate on u but that reminds me of some lil Wayne type shit n I despise lil wayne. You need to add more substance to your rhymes to liven them up. Pick a topic cus ppl r bored with hearin about a dudes swag n their doe etc. Throw in some metas wordplay n punchlines n ull have a decent drop. Just b original n stay true to yourself. I know this was a free but even frees need to have at least some attempts at wordplay etc.

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Re: Mac Miller Knock Knock [Freestyle]

Post by NoVeL »

Hey man, I appreciate you doing ya thing. Check the forums dude. You might get more incite on how to better revise your drops. Although this was FAIR, I think there's a lot more potential in you. Try to rap about a topic that isn't generic.
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Re: Mac Miller Knock Knock [Freestyle]

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elevation would suite you.. really basic no real direction.. but keep on writing and youll get better
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Re: Mac Miller Knock Knock [Freestyle]

Post by Simplicius »

Meh do you man, this is whats popping off, if you want to go underground you can add alot more substance to the drops, but as far as popular rap goes this is tight.
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