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M33Kish
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Good Morning, and goodnight

Post by M33Kish »

Sleepy, but i had this flow stuck in my head, feedback?

[soundcloud]http://soundcloud.com/m33kish/goodmornin-and-goodnight[/soundcloud]

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Ill be better than your timing, buyin booze and cruisin islands/
Flying paper planes I'm lyin, ill be high as cali's climate/
Clockin hours, pay me daily, playin black ops ps3 me/
B man meekish on a killstreak, I eat emcees squares and ruphees/
Know my name and how I do things, steal yo cookies bitch I'm scooby/
But my beard is awfly shaggy, and my mind is slow a daphny/
Check my rap sheet, hear some tight beats/
See my voice it sounds it sounds like swageese/
On a planet far from standards all my bitches got bad manners/
But they butt as big as bold words/
See I slur my verbs like big birds friend, the big one with the furry skin/
They all got fuzzy skin in fact, the kind you use to dry your ass/
I had to take some time out just to fake a laugh/
The grass is greener out a sack/
No under-handed slaps, just fact/
My rhymes is tight, I say they wack, my flow is just like this and that/
I'm dopish crap, just peep this rap this whole time I've been spittin crack/
And not the kind you think you like, my drops they blow like dynamite/
Pussys awesome even kinda tight I eat it like a klondike bite/
My punches like a thousand fight, with hooks that give you underbites/
whose tryna fight?/
Anyways I spit for days, and do it big in many ways/
Just check the smirk stamped on my face phone is filled with strays/
Stay blowin me all day the words I spit so slick all my chickens swore they draws away/
And that's ok cause I be tellin bitch POP 1,
Then I throw my balls in bitches jaws till she naw on em just like "nyum nyum"/
See hun, you could keep it coo and just do you but doin me it feels like heav-on/
So join the party bus and sip this hen some/
Oriental flow, delivery is msg refer to me as little dim sum/
Slow runnin round the rest my writtens rollin off my tongue like, peace one.../
The Meek Shall Prosper... So they say :P
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Re: Good Morning, and goodnight

Post by Defiance »

quick pace, lack of emotion.. good flow... kinda quiet with the vocals.. one of the strangest beats i've heard. i kept hearing a bitch moan in my head to the beat.. but i liked it.. was this a freestyle. if it was thats dope.

but overall, needs better production, but was feeling it any ways

keep it up man
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Re: Good Morning, and goodnight

Post by Alvin »

ok... work speakers are not the greatest, so i wont touch on quality... The flow, well, is in the midst of good delivery but reading it straight from paper. Not bad, but after a while, it sounds bland. Like a rollercoaster that never really does anything. You are starting to develop a catchy style, you just have to UMPH shit up a bit, put a little more expression. The lyrics arent bad, kinda all over the place. Decent man, keep at it.
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Re: Good Morning, and goodnight

Post by EcKsTaSy »

I love shit bro..diggin the monotone ..sick beat..fuck I'd bump it..nice summer song..good shit
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Re: Good Morning, and goodnight

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kinda like the monotone feel of it.... turn the beat down cuz it drowns you out man.... especially when ur gonna rap inna lower monotoned voice.... nice flow..... keep at it man....
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Re: Good Morning, and goodnight

Post by Itz Nell »

this was pretty good, loved the beat and your flow was consistent, lyrics was decent, maybe could of been lyrically stronger in parts if youd of added multis, but not bad at all
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