A Thing

[Loon E Lou]

Maaaaaaaan such an easy effective flow to this. This was easy to recite man. The subject is a deep one from what i can tell. I think we've all been inna similar situation.

Make a wish... let me bring some good luck to you//
I'll take you so high even those in Heaven will look up to you//


Awesome line. I can tell theres that hidden emotion that you decide to let out everyonce an a while. This was an enjoyable read man. Im eager to read the next pieces to ur puzzle. I like this typa shit man. You weren tryna make it unreadable with a buncha big random words. I felt every word in it had its purpose. Dope drop cory

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[Demo+]

This Was Pretty Dope.

Constant Flow. Good Use Of Multies. Metaphors Was Great.. And Tha Story Line Was Decent.. Enjoyable Read.

If You Add'd Ah' Extra Twist To It It'll Be Fire..

[M33Kish]

I would say dope piece, but you already know this. I would say the story in itself was dope, but you probably already knew that. I would say that I wish it kept on going, but you probably don't care.... dope ass fuckin piece.....

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[vanity]

nice flow and very creative i enjoyed it good job