GIMME SOME FEEDBACK ON THIS...

[Young Trell]

TELL ME WHAT YOU THINK...

[video]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=K7q36PUMkwI[/video]

[BennyBones]

the beat is hot.. and ill give u props for delivery.. keep it up check some othe trasks i did.. i dont write but i record and go over.. till its done

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[Alvin]

Not even going to lie, delivery is dope man, nice display of intellect, and flow. You record in a pro studio? Quality is dope, rhyme schemes are dope man. Not really my cup of tea, but I know a lot of people who would feel this. Where is the chorus? Seems like a quick drop, or a snippet. Wait, is the first flow, not you, and you come in at the end? the flow itself is cool man, but the substance is the only problem i see, and the fact that its more of a snippet than a song. Dope drop man, welcome to Illest

[Loon E Lou]

Hell fuckin yea man! This some shit right here. You have complete comfort with ur presentation and delivery. The energy was perfect throughout the piece. The beat is killin shit too man, nice production. Content wise, i like it man. On some "gotta straighten my ass up" shit. U had some good lines here and there. I like how you jus kept shit goin on the flow. FUCK A HOOK PANDA!!! Haha yea man i was diggin this. The quality is str8 from what i can see. You really seem like you know what your doin. Post some more shit man, i look forward to it. Welcome home

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[Young Trell]

Not even going to lie, delivery is dope man, nice display of intellect, and flow. You record in a pro studio? Quality is dope, rhyme schemes are dope man. Not really my cup of tea, but I know a lot of people who would feel this. Where is the chorus? Seems like a quick drop, or a snippet. Wait, is the first flow, not you, and you come in at the end? the flow itself is cool man, but the substance is the only problem i see, and the fact that its more of a snippet than a song. Dope drop man, welcome to Illest

LOL... Its me through the whole thing.... I go from written to freestylin off the top of the head...Preciate the feedback... Elaborate on what you meant bout the substance....

[Evans]

Nice work man, got some cool punchlines in there and I cant knock the flow!

[leeroi green]

yo thats a solid drop i like your studio presense i think what panda meant about substance is although it sounds good listening to it i'd like to hear something a lil deeper ya dig but thats not me trying to take anything away from you it just thats usually the diff between a good song and a classic hit y'know