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I wonder why our black males; are calling our brothas a nigga,
Fixin the smaller situations aint gon change it; but make it bigger.
The mo money;The less respect,
I wonder why my brother had to die so yung;Malcolm X
Now todays society is all about cars,weed & an rolex,
I find them suspects; A ghetto thug living in the projects.
Our people are going to jail over sudden violent threats,
I pray for the ones that still have faith; DMX .



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played subject matter... but none the less good intents

liked the malcom x line, and the general message

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i liked wear you were going with this cant wait to see the whole thing
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The idea of this has a strong yet deeper feel to it
it may seem kind of elementary but at the same time "real"
it has the foundation of being a great piece if you pick it up stronger
and run with the idea thoroughly...keep writing!
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Hardships and cultural misunderstandings plague us all, regardless of race, gender, or creed. Good subject matter, dude. Pick up were you left off and fatten this piece up..you seem to have something worthwhile to say.
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