MY beat + freestyle

[Defiance]

a beat i created yesterday with a friend. and a freestyle over it
tell me what you think.

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tell me what you think of the beat, my first attempt thus far

[Grim]

i thought flow had some real spots and some chopping spots...the more singy type parts were actually tighter then the most of the rap parts...not bad over all but if you perfect that combonation style of rap type lyrics with a singing type..i like that vibe a lot..for some smooth relaxing stuff...if you're trying to make this more hip-hop though you need a little more bounce behind the guitar so the guitar is as overwhelming...but i like the sing/rap vibe myself...keep at it....

[Defiance]

thanks man, upping

[Kurse]

Nice string play...I really like laid back jawns like this, I rip tracks like this to shreds when it comes to chillin in the studio. haha Freestyle was nice, everything came together pretty solid. Though with a production that clean, I definitely wouldn't waste it on a freestyle. If I were you, I'd go back to the boards and drop some written shit on there and use it for an intro/outro for a mixtape or album. Food for thought my friend. I give this an 8/10 ...had there been some written shit on here that flowed well throughout the course of the track, it'd be an easy 10.

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[Defiance]

thanks man, appreciate the feed

[Audible Thought]

Im really feeling the beat, i agree with kurse, this beat deserves more than a freestyle. I would definately like to hop on this beat if you're interested, we can make a killer tune.

[Defiance]

yeah man, maybe another on, this ones still got some tweaking to do on and probably just re-record it on friday uppin

[Slicka]

this shit was alright. had some spots in it where you could of done more with but for a freestyle was decent. i think if you wrote to it you would murder this beat. keep em comin
slicka

[TreTru]

haha feelin that beat..that cypher feel..

haha..im diggin most of the rythm..you stay steady..

haha this is cool for a freestyle bro...haha..im really
feelin the vibe tho..laid back playin with it...

I do agree with some of the homies..why waste potential sit down and write it..you already got a buncha dope lines in it..just put a few more thoughtful lines in there...

either way this was a decent listen dawg...keep doin ya thing..1

[M33Kish]

This shit was dope. the organ near the end fucked me up for a second, but it settled in nice with the rest of the beat. Freestyle was pretty sick too.

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