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a lil overly religious for my tastes.. but none the less

it was a good read, was feelin the 1 and 3rd verse the most, dont know how well that short of shit would translate over a beat but....

yeah good shit man, you got some skills with the pen my friend
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Nice drop man
I am the punishment of god.... Had you not Committed great sins, god would not have sent a punishment like me upon you.
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Don't agree with your views but dope piece nonetheless
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Damn, this is a good piece, love religious shit man, big into church conspiricies and shit, imma write something along these lines. Good read rellik

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Or somewhere else... I can easily prove their system fails
Point to the "stars in the dark night" & watch every 'Christian Bail'
The Reverend runs, no Adidas.. conversations starting up
Got me asking "did Tsunami victims not pray hard enough?"

nice few lines

Do ya lie? Raise em' in a world that's completely fake?
Or say... "regardless, I love you... & I'ma keep you safe"
Self esteem is played, open hands watching people pray
Collections feeds the hate, dirty hands clean the plate
Animals become dust, wilderness becomes real estate

like that there bud

nice little drop, would of prefered to see to verses tho instead of the two choruses, but i liked what i read, looking forward to your next peice.
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Re: A Hole In The Confessional Booth (REVISED, READ ME!!!)

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good stuff. to me 1st and 2nd verse were good. not a religious man but it wuz good rhymin. 1 question tho...? how wuz buddha a narcissist? :think:
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