Welcome to Illest Lyrics forum established in 2005.
----
Free Vapes

MonuMental -- Smoke Town

Release your best recorded material and let the world hear your talent. It doesn't matter what level you are on - you will get constructive feedback to increase your skills.

Moderator: Loon E Lou

Forum rules
Embed your soundclick video players with [soundclick]Song Id[/soundclick]. You can also just put [soundclick]Embed Code[/soundclick].

Please go back and fix as many of your old songs as you want.
Post Reply
User avatar
MonuMental
Hairy Scoundrel
Offline
Posts: 528
Joined: Fri Feb 18, 2011 9:09 pm
Location: Leland, MS

MonuMental -- Smoke Town

Post by MonuMental »

Writ, spit, and produced by yours truly. My boy Grand Fanali overlaid the 808's and whatnot, so props to my homie.
2. Smoke Town.mp3


http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/best- ... 21226.html

http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/the-s ... 21230.html
[center]Peel back the facade and behold a bold insanity,
With no repose or vanity, composed of inhumanity.[/center]
[center]Image[/center]
[center]Image[/center]
[center]Image[/center]
[center]Illest Awards For 2011:
Text MC of the Year- MonuMental
Class of 2011- MonuMental, Enlightend, 3rd String, CBK, and Pest
Writer of the Year- MonuMental
Written of the Year- MonuMental 'A Series of Unfortunate Events'[/center]

[center]a-series-of-unfortunate-events-vt23866.html[/center]
Top
Loon E Lou
Fuck You, Pay Me
Offline
Posts: 1024
Joined: Thu Jan 14, 2010 5:46 am
Wins: 11
Losses: 6
Location: 831, California

Re: MonuMental -- Smoke Town

Post by Loon E Lou »

this is dope man. the beat is ill. pretty lay back. i like that style you got. real lay back, relaxed, and my type of subject. as for a smokin track, eeeeehh iunno about the beat. its dope but iunno about it bein a smokin track if ya feel me. clean production. you got a smooth voice that reminds me of a west coast feel. you got good lyrics. i dont know flowing is your bread an butter, but you carried yourself pretty well. i liked the keys on the beat. real elaborate. good track tho man. nice to hear some new stuff.
Top
User avatar
MonuMental
Hairy Scoundrel
Offline
Posts: 528
Joined: Fri Feb 18, 2011 9:09 pm
Location: Leland, MS

Re: MonuMental -- Smoke Town

Post by MonuMental »

Duely noted and I appreciate the feed, bruh.
[center]Peel back the facade and behold a bold insanity,
With no repose or vanity, composed of inhumanity.[/center]
[center]Image[/center]
[center]Image[/center]
[center]Image[/center]
[center]Illest Awards For 2011:
Text MC of the Year- MonuMental
Class of 2011- MonuMental, Enlightend, 3rd String, CBK, and Pest
Writer of the Year- MonuMental
Written of the Year- MonuMental 'A Series of Unfortunate Events'[/center]

[center]a-series-of-unfortunate-events-vt23866.html[/center]
Top
User avatar
Audible Thought
Rhyme Master
Offline
Posts: 174
Joined: Tue Jul 06, 2010 7:04 am
Losses: 2
Location: Toronto

Re: MonuMental -- Smoke Town

Post by Audible Thought »

This is dope, i like the beat. FLow is on point and your voice sounds very bone thuggish especially on the chorus. One thing i could say is to work on your delivery, you get a little too monotone at times. overall this a dope piece keep writing.
"Until we're all free fuck the world pass the weed, life ain't what it seems y'all we chasin fantasies"-Lastchild [R.I.P]
Top
User avatar
Immortal Jav
Lyrically Inclined
Offline
Posts: 136
Joined: Fri Mar 25, 2011 7:34 am
Wins: 1
Losses: 5

Re: MonuMental -- Smoke Town

Post by Immortal Jav »

that was so laid back.. dope ish dude props
Top
User avatar
Nah
Rookie
Offline
Posts: 18
Joined: Thu Mar 31, 2011 4:10 am

Re: MonuMental -- Smoke Town

Post by Nah »

I like your rhymes nice flow and lyrics but I gotta agree with Loon E Lou that the production doesnt fit the "get high" topic. The piano gives it a dark/grimmy feel that affects the overall atmosphere of the song. Track would be perfect if your dope rhymes are supported by some snoop dogg type beat you know i'm saying.
Top
User avatar
The Hand of God
Potential Emcee
Offline
Posts: 30
Joined: Tue Mar 15, 2011 10:21 am
Location: Beckley, WV
Contact:
Contact The Hand of God

Re: MonuMental -- Smoke Town

Post by The Hand of God »

i'm not a fan of smoke songs in general

i don't think that this beat fits the subject either

if you switched the beat to something different it could be dope though
Top
User avatar
MonuMental
Hairy Scoundrel
Offline
Posts: 528
Joined: Fri Feb 18, 2011 9:09 pm
Location: Leland, MS

Re: MonuMental -- Smoke Town

Post by MonuMental »

I appreciate all the feedback, folk. I'll def keep everyone's suggestions in mind.
[center]Peel back the facade and behold a bold insanity,
With no repose or vanity, composed of inhumanity.[/center]
[center]Image[/center]
[center]Image[/center]
[center]Image[/center]
[center]Illest Awards For 2011:
Text MC of the Year- MonuMental
Class of 2011- MonuMental, Enlightend, 3rd String, CBK, and Pest
Writer of the Year- MonuMental
Written of the Year- MonuMental 'A Series of Unfortunate Events'[/center]

[center]a-series-of-unfortunate-events-vt23866.html[/center]
Top
User avatar
ShysT
Potential Emcee
Offline
Posts: 36
Joined: Fri Feb 04, 2011 6:11 am

Re: MonuMental -- Smoke Town

Post by ShysT »

This was pretty sick, liked the hook, somethin nice to lay back and smoke a spliff to. Only thing i could say is try to elevate your rhymes, get more creative with that shit....peace
Top
User avatar
TreTru
Rap Professional
Offline
Posts: 1608
Joined: Mon Dec 01, 2008 5:35 am
Wins: 9
Losses: 5

Re: MonuMental -- Smoke Town

Post by TreTru »

vocalz sound pretty well mixxed my dude.. not much to say about it ..flo presence is all on..but i will say that beat def aint worthy of the concept..just not a very good beat..the rest is fire homey..keep droppin hot shit..
Top
Post Reply

Return to “The Booth”

Who is online

Users browsing this forum: No registered users and 5 guests