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So Tired Feat. Young Joe

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So Tired Feat. Young Joe

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http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/relli ... 21024.html

heres another one off my new album. hope yall enjoy it. feed an get fed
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Yo, that was very dope man...Probably the best I've heard from you...The beat was catchy, the intro was str8, I like your verse the best, as the second verse wasn't as good and took a lil away from the song, but its still dope...Really good job, quality material, hopefully u get more feed and views...if u get a chance check out my drop at http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/the-l ... 20926.html
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Thanx man. Im actually the second verse but thas ku. Appreciate u takin the time. Ill peep ur drop as soon as get home man. Thnx again

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ooops srry man, I hate giving negative criticism without any advice, so on a second listen ur verse really isnt that bad, I have to get use to your voice tho...the one thing that stuck out to me would word placement and vocab...u try to squeeze to many words sometimes or u don't let them hit the beat right, either way with more practice ull get it down...also vocab just more syllables and a more technical style would help the delivery, besides those two things ur str8 man...again nice drop
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haha. thanks man. i appreciate the constructive critisism. ill deffy take a wack at some multi syllables.
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I Liked ur verse tho.. i dunno bout giving advice on it. over all i think i think ur verse was better than ya boys. had that crisp sound. No falling behind on the beat.. keep on droppin famo

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I Liked ur verse tho.. i dunno bout giving advice on it. over all i think i think ur verse was better than ya boys. had that crisp sound. No falling behind on the beat.. keep on droppin famo
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Re: So Tired Feat. Young Joe

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'dope like i hit rocks'

i didn't like the intro though, shit confused me at first
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