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Audible Thought
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The Walk

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[video]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=q7losWuOIhI[/video]

im walking down the street with my headphones blastin
my bags packed with nothing but some water and snacks and
a little bit of weed, to cope with this traffic
im going full speed cuz im tired of standing
on this, monopoly board im going where the cash is
the problem is i dont know exactly where the stash is
still advance on this concrete im rapping
the scenes that i see, the peace and the madness
the people i meet, the saints and the bastards
we're all here to be the one grazin the pastures
this is a long walk theres many many crashes
the pressure on the feet got me loosin my balance
and the, travel is blindin from the lights flashing
but i am living feeling every bit of passion
like a kid in a class, got questions for the answers
theres too little time to take too many chances
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Alvin
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Re: The Walk

Post by Alvin »

This is smooth man, real mellow beat. Flows on point when i rapped it calmly, wordage has a nice combination of simple and complex. I like how it starts casual, laid back, but you slowly bring in the knowledge. Smooth, finish it man!
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Re: The Walk

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nice shit, not the hardest complexity wise but the nice smooth easy flow matched perfect with the beat, dope use of the same rhymescheme for a whole 16 bars, nothing too amazing yet nothing wack at all, good verse.
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Re: The Walk

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I love how smooth it is, the words fit perfectly with the beat. Very peaceful, extremely enjoyable. My only criticism is that it ended. I'd love to read more.
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Re: The Walk

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the scenes that i see, the peace and the madness
the people i meet, the saints and the bastards


I like the scene set up for the flow, good drop.
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