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Ill as I Wanna Be

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http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=1x3iVPMcGv8

Quality is jacked, I know.

Second verse could been a bit stronger, but I just did this one on the fly kinda just to get the lyrics recorded.
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i like your style bruh. sounds like you ran outa breath in certain points but it was still raw. i love the beat and the hook is hella catchy. caught myself spittin it along with you. thats the goal right? lol good work bro keep dropping.
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lol, yeah i did a bit cuz i had did cuz i had record somethin right before that one and I had to hurry up and get done. Thx for the feedback.
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I Agree, Your Delivery Is Nice. Idk, I Think You Shuda Did Sumthing To Make Your Chorus Sound Different From Your Verse, I Didn't Notice It Was The hook Until It Started Repeating Itself, Then I Was Like Ohhhh. U Got Sum Good Multi'z. "Take The Game, Fuck Tha Players" Nice. For Bad Quality, U Still Made It Sound Nice. I Felt You Layered It up Too Much, And That Was Your Downfall IMO. Overall, Decent Listen. U Jus Need A New Setup, And You'll Be Set, Up! Lol
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yeah i hate to judge a track by its quality but quality helps ALOT.. so it takes potential out of the track.. your flow is killer man.. way digging the beat.. hook is way sick also.. i like the way you delivery, it did sound like you ran outta breath in some places, gotta just work on timing on where to breath and all that.. this is pretty sick track man.. good drop
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preciate the feedback from every1, Ill work on that
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