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Like the delivery man very smooth, creates a nice feel for the beat. The lyrics were str8 for the concept, clean, and u were on point. Not a bad drop at all, maybe add a lil emotion at time, cuz it sounded a lil monotone but besides that it wasnt bad.
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thanks. appreciate it
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I'm digging the beat selection, not sure if you made it. The delivery was a real one so that's cool, kinda like your just trying to get ish off your chest. Sometimes the flow falls off but its character. I'm not sure what your doing to your voice or how you recorded it, but it sounds thin. 3rd verse is prolly your lyrically best. The echo off the ending into the chorus is nicely timed and faded. The grunting at the end sounds funny, but all to their own.

I liked it man, a little thin (for the lack of a better word), on the vocals, but nice drop. Sorry took me so long to peep this out, just been caught up man. Keep dropping some audio's man. I was under the impression your booth emcee style sucked from a conversation in the shout box, but it's pretty dope man. Damn hook and you saying on fire is stuck in my head now.
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Good looks for the feed man.

By Thin do u mean a little low sounding,
I think it might be the Reverb to lighten the S's...
that was my brilliant plan lol.. Let me know though. i'll def return all feed to everyone
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I liked the overall feel of this. I was actually really digging the hook, too. I would have to say the only thing I would change about it is to mix up the beat more during the hook. Build it up during those parts.
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the beats pretty sick.... first verse is cool flow wise... don't hear a lot of emotion... kinda robotic... lyric wise its cool... hooks sick... second verse... a lot better... liked it... pretty good shit... third verse... i liked this too... would have liked to hear some Ad libs in it to kinda keep the verses alive... n make em stand out... like the delay on the end... over all good track man... you've been definitely uppin your audio game... give this a 7.5/10...

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by the way .. Its a Lil Wayne instrumental.
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that would explain the beat when it sounds like the snares delayed a bit lol
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lol yeah.. upping
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