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Veteran Skills

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Instrumental:
[video]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=XSjmoIcUXZM[/video]

Verse & Hook from a collab...

[Phasewon]
Verbal surgical incision, every word is perfect precision
The murderous edition, my verses are surely efficient
Cursin' and dissin', when I'm riffin' forget the cast and crutches
I'ma hack you up 'n retract your stomach like tax deductions
My track production is like a weapon of mass destruction
Glass is crushin' while my whole rap's eruptin' like gas combustion
If I catch you bluffin' I'll leave you with lacerations
Slash your face 'n lace the task with casings and the mask of Jason
Procrastinate 'n I'll attack your fate with Satan, waitin'
At the gates with masking tape, you're facin' your assassination
A fascination for lyrics, that's why I rap amazin'
And every track I'm blazin' is sicker than cancer patients
Grazin' your skull with the blade 'til the razor is dull
Raisin' a full eclipse and pullin' clips to leave your face with a hole
Forsakin' your soul into Hell for population control
Hurl the world in reverse and throw off the earth's gravitational pull
We breakin' the mold, I roll with a mass alliance
Nasa rhymers, every line is more advanced than math and science
Master minders, spreading acts of violence, and riots
So just sit back in silence, be quiet, before you catch the virus

[Chorus x2]
Head for the hills, we generals built, with veteran skills
Better than ill, lyrically ready to kill
When sentences spill, every syllables sendin' you chills
So best believe if I don't kill you, my penmanship will
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Post by The Gonz »

Shit was ill as fuck. Excellent multies and wordplay.
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This was ill from top to bottom and it goes in raw with the beat duke. Perfect multis and wording in this piece. I hope you record this one.
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^Holy shit, there's twitter bots now? Eat an AIDS dick, faggot. Props to Ruckus and Gen for feed.
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Yeah this shit was dope, good rhyme scheme all around vocab was fire, impressed.
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Re: Veteran Skills

Post by IntrinsicCadence »

Ill. The rhythm and rhyme scheme is real consistent, and ur use of multis is flawless. This is made to be audio'd, so I hope u get a chance to record this at some point and post it up in these forums. I'd like to see a written from u about some kinda topic or theme at some point, u got mad lyrical skill, but it seems like sometimes if u were to whittle down the underlying message to it's essence there's not a whole lot really being said. Don't take this as a diss or anything like that, cuz as is this piece and all ur drops I've read are really good, I just think if u had some more solid/juicy/meaningful/interesting themes it'd bring ur writtens to another level...
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i really felt this shit fam ... this came across hard body!


cadence pretty much summed it up! 1
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Re: Veteran Skills

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I'm sure your audio is a perfect as this.word placement,mutlis and just raw lyrical content make this drop
one of the best written pieces on this site.stay up dunn.
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If I catch you bluffin' I'll leave you with lacerations
Slash your face 'n lace the task with casings and the mask of Jason
Procrastinate 'n I'll attack your fate with Satan, waitin'
At the gates with masking tape, you're facin' your assassination
A fascination for lyrics, that's why I rap amazin'
And every track I'm blazin' is sicker than cancer patients
Grazin' your skull with the blade 'til the razor is dull
Raisin' a full eclipse and pullin' clips to leave your face with a hole
Forsakin' your soul into Hell for population control
Hurl the world in reverse and throw off the earth's gravitational pull


Best Part of the piece... First four/6 lines sounded Like eminem in 'We ain't'.. consistent all the way through.. good shit, Keep dropping
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Re: Veteran Skills

Post by QwarterZ »

Daaaaaamn man....like always you never fail to impress
your lyrical prowess is very skilled man, I can't wait to hear this
the flow on this from how I was saying it really put emphasis in ur words
and the beat just brings this menacing vibe to it as well

bravo...bravo....
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