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TALES FROM MY RETINA

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I spit tales from my eyes, spit what i live, live what i spit
my life sick, AIDS my roommate, i live with that shit
paranoia got me peakin over my shoulder more frequent
undercovers got a cell reserved for me at the precinct
so i move in the shadows, cautious at all times
ima jack of all trades, master of all grinds
i push coke in mornin, move weed when the sunset
robbin ballers out in Vegas, made 'em strip on the sunset
i done traveled cross the country seen it all and did more
from mothers killed by they kids to dudes goin raw in whores
i take it all in an jot it down on my tablet
i hover over the median, meanin im above average
half chancellor half savage, my lifes controlled chaos
im a happy authoritarian, not to be confused with gay cops
jealousy is somethin' i kant stand
my emotions in my palms, im clumsy, dont let my temper get outta hand
.....I walk across the sun barefoot lookin' for shade......
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Re: TALES FROM MY RETINA

Post by Kau the Lion »

Some decent wordplay here and there but nothing too impressive. The second line made it sound like you have AIDS. Not sure if that was on purpose? Basically, the usual skills braggadocio. Try added a twist to it or bringing something new. Spice it up a bit. Either that or you need some stronger punches.
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Re: TALES FROM MY RETINA

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thankx for the comment
.....I walk across the sun barefoot lookin' for shade......
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