SLIKS RAP LYRICS

[John Bambrough]

My LYRICS This is just a few ideas it aint a full song (not in rap format!)
So look at me as one, where together in this family, waiting for a smile or someone to wright down there feelings in this diary, as we sing to the sky rarely, because at the moment we can bearly speak to each other as a family, we can't understand quite why don't connect together, or gel together, it seems like an invisible barrear, keeping us apart, wright from the start, like a magnet, except were falling apart.

Look I'm not looking for the type of girl, who spins her whole head in a swirl, and wonders why her life is so ****ed up, as she waits to find out if she is knocked up so look were not spending yours where spending mine it could be a sign then to a regular yellow or would you rather face a fine when I sign the red dotted line.......its over where through, I should have never let you sue.


Life is like a world of opportunities, as we rhyme, we dont really understand what were saying half the time, we just say whatever comes into our head at the time, dont matter if its broken up or dead, it keeps our brain cells working in our head.


I hear the clock ticken in my veins, its like a bullet to my brain, as it feels so insane, I understand that where going through a change just the same, I like but I dont love the pain, I dont know why we just cant get along, in this ****ing song, I aint done nothing wrong, ye I know you belong, we both belong, in this song, now lets just all make up and get along.

It seems that the harder that I try to make things better for you and I, everything that I do just seems to backfire on me and you, and when where not together, I feel a sudden rush for us to be together, because I realise that everything is so much better, when were together, so I sing, me and you, you and I can fly, wright up to the sky, if we both just agree, to sing together in harmony.

Say hello, I am here to watch the show, As my mam and dad scream at each other '****ing go' like they aint ever seen each other, its like the source of the pain, is a kane, tightly rapped around my chest, like a bullet proof vest, and I need to breakout, but it seems like the harder that I try, They all just walk away and don't even say goodbye, So they leave me in this ****in mess, as I sit and stress.............

This is a song I am writing to you, to emphasize the pain I am feeling for you, As I walk out the door, I see you lying there on the kitchen floor, with a kitchen knife in your hand, But you can't even stand, To finish the job, You see the spotlight is on, And you know that I am the one.

When you realise the stress, And hold on to the less, Unfortunate of us, Who are normally so just, It can only mean one thing, lust, The lust for life is such a beautiful thing, That the more fortunate of us, Sometimes take life for granted, Even though we try we just cannot comply, There's just these selfish mother****ers, who wish that they would all just burn and die.

How many people on this earth, Really know the true meaning of a child birth, As I spit out this verse, How many kids are gonna get ill or worse?

The one and only SLICK is here to watch you burn, As you turn and face the fire, And realise your a liar, Saiten is here to welcome you, And contemplate what you have been through, He says ' Look here, this is a gift I have given to you'.

The ideas in my brain, Keep me perfectly sain, Even in the rain, The thoughts are still the same, Like a bullet to the brain, I can't be stopped, I won't back down, As long as I don't drown, In this ****in town!

Bleeding from the head is like a sudden rush of dread, As you realise the pain, And contemplate just the same, But I didn't mean to be down, As I look all around, All I see is my frown, Incased in my head like a bucket full of sickening red.


To all those haters, Interegaters, Those sickening faggots, squatting on there little maggots, SLIK is here to tell you a little story, So listen and reminice, And find out what you all have missed.

The Brain is a rope to Fame, It picks you up, spits u out, then watches as the soul drains.

In my birth place I had a future Shouldn't you be able to have a place that suits ya? Many years have past as well as tutors but no real steps forward to determine my future. Oh did I mention a real step back as I wanda helplessly on a crazy track. Ye this place is like a death trap without walls or doors just a sign to Hell and back.

At the age of eleven, A moved to this house, I couldn't believe the size of the place, Smaller than a spouse, From where a came from to where I am now, Millions upon millions of mindless rows, Intoxicate my brain even though it feels just the same, I love it like I do a football game. I hate this place, I wanna go home, I don't belong here, someone call my phone.

SLIK

[FlipSide]

ok i read the whole thing..... rhymes schemes were pretty simple... the ideas were crarly there and u made your message carry tho at point it just seemed to be ideas put together....some sort of an essay.. maybe because of the way u structured it... in terms of writing music or poetry u need to even up your lines so that it flows a lil bit better... take a look at the way most people write on here and ull c what i mean. other than that u had the concept of rhyming down for shure.. ull get the word play and vocab up with practice and feeding the work of other people... by the way.. if u leave feed on other peoples work u will def recieve feed on ur work... 1


Im Out

[The Man]

It was alright. Need to fix the structure, the rhymes were decent.

[Orfadox]

nothing amazing in there but saying that nothing bad in there either you got the right idea but like flip said work on ya structure a lil bit vocab wasnt to great but ya can easily fix that by reading newspapers,magazines even a dictionary

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[Markb]

Ok I will put it blunt, because I'm a straight forwards type of guy
I think everyone should be treated individually the same, no matter how good/bad/talented they are or assume to actually be
Your structure is a complete failure,
A structure of a written piece is not only to make it easier to read, follow, direct aspects of :- mulit's, syllables, meta's and concept
BUT it is also to deliver your bars, reason and FLOW through out your whole verse
For me you either rushed this or you couldn't be bothered..!!
You didn't even add breakers to show where your flow stopped started

I felt the whole verse had no meaning, you didn't diverse a topic or delivery
you showed no prospects of punches or signs of set up lines that could lead to anything
You double'd words to Rhyme with themselves and you lacked comprehension that could at least
show inelegance towards the piece

I don't want to make out that I'm a hater because I'm not
I like to consider myself as a realist
I'd rather you go away, learn from what I have said and hopefully provide something better to read
Websites like this are here for 2 reasons, to provide people with reading material that they may enjoy
and also for the person whom has posted to get back enjoyment from constructive criticism

I hope I have provided you with the knowledge that you have needed and I'll hopefully get to read
something better from you in the future

~Markb~