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talent401
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I rather talk about a savior than killin the streets,
But if i show emotion then its showin im weak,
My emotions are 2pac-ed so call em deceased,
i have a hunger for musik so im hittin the feast,
its my last dinner b4 his blood is released,
He said in about a day its almost mission complete,
So im hittin the sheets sleepin next to a piece,
Click clack pow is wat i hear in my sleep,
Cuz ima soldier and im use to the field,
i live in my dreams and i dont even kno wat is real,
ninja instinct cuz in silence i kill,
im ready for any confrontation of will,
Ill have any1 swollow there words like there drinkin a pill,
Penetrate ur stomach then ask how it feels,
Im starvin for the fame like a model skippin her meals,
so u betta think twice like u reachen them yields,
So any obsctacle i demolish and problems i solve,
The cause the walls the falls the laws i resolve,
its time of battle so im up of the floor,
Snap back to reality and see bodies i guess it wasnt a dream after all...


-Talent

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DoggyStylez
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Off tha hook loco, these are my kinda rymez...only downfall i see is a spellin mistake:

My emotions are 2pac-ed so call em decieced,
i have a hunger for musik so im hittin the feast,

*deceased....

Flow was really good. Tha last part rocked it bro
So any obsctacle i demolish and problems i solve,
The cause the walls the falls the laws i resolve,
its time of battle so im up of da floor,
Snap back to reality and see bodies i guess it wasnt a dream after all...
luv'd tha whole scheme of it all, if they hand u tha mike u kno how to ball.....lol
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this wasnt bad man, lyrics could be tightened up a bit. it had a nice little flow to it. the story was sort of short and not that detailed but it was alright for what it was. just try and expand and describe some things in the story you are trying to tell us. keep doin ya thing man holla
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Good looks on da feedbakk...keep it cummin...(no homo)...lol..

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