Cimmerian Marionettes (feat. DJ Delivery)

[IntrinsicCadence]

This one's different than what I've posted up thus far, thought I'd get some feedback on it. I pasted up the lyrics to it to, thought it might be useful with this one.

Just to let you know Cimmerians are a mythical people in Homer's Odyssey that live in darkness on the cusp between earth and Hades.


(with DJ Delivery- 'Fallin')
/In the darkness of the day
The Cimmerian marionettes are caged
In a state of terror and blame./
Welcome to this Odyssey
(0:24) The rivers of rage erupt in the most vivid of ways.
(0:30) The simmering insanity seethes in streams tarnished
By baths of carnage the massive wrath of man casts.
The crimson stained path of disastrous madness
is trapped in catastrophe's shadowy fabric
allowing (0:48) incalculable casualties
Mountains of the carcass heaps
(are) decomposing- in the parks and streets
causing hopes- to depart and flee
to the darkest deeps where the ethics of the beast
speak in the markets as the markers to achieve...
(1:00) and while genocides proceed and maniacal tyrants lead,
the rising of the violence covers these
regions with devious schemers that feed on the need to be higher than kings.
(1:12) This demeanor, this demoness fever, is favored by fascists,
who, with razors under their mattress, languish in their castles,
encased in a fear
that may never abate even when the weight of the battles disappear.
/In the darkness of the day
The Cimmerian marionettes are caged
In a state of terror and blame./
(1:48) Hazes of hate make the tale of time take a trip through tainted tenets.
Hazes of hate make the tale of time take a trip...
(2:00) This menacing sentence descending from contemporary lenses
Symbolizes the tension drenched temper tantrums terrorizing
the sphere where resides eyes staring at the mirror of life./
(2:12) The tyranny of time carelessly buries innocent minds
deep inside illusionary misperceptions that fester in lies.
(2:24) Revolutionary cries carry blame but rarely solutions that will sustain.
Today’s cynical fangs are at the pinnacle of hindering actual change.
Motivation becomes drained through constant streams of critical rage,
and disillusioned stares are produced when the air is overtaken by the anger of a haters stranglin' behavior blanketin' the atmosphere with delusional fear.
It’s deeper than you’d ever know, so never cease your search to reach that goal.
Teach that soul the seat to uphold to defeat the feeble hold fiendish foes clutch.
(3:00) The shadows concealed the view when the luminous hues were eclipsed by deceptive perceptions that festered in the skies of dissention... When the passing planet cast darkness across the horizon, the stars would lead the march aright... The depressed realms fell on the blackened night, but the torches were held high to guide the path past the domain of the defiant evil eye that beheld hell in a somber passage through this sphere of creations belt... This abyss would subside when the lingering phantom rised from the pits of time and journeyed to the filament of the fire...
Thoughts of hate must be conquered and tamed through stronger thoughts of love...

[Truup-Leef]

it was iight...sound like some dark devil worshiping type shit.... ..lol..but..it was hot tho man...keep it up


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[HKX]

I wasn't really feelin' dis track man my bad da pauses bothered me a lil bit beat was weird 2 me but at da same time it fit wat u was doin'. Not da best I've heard 4rm u but dis was decent keep droppin' man

[IntrinsicCadence]

thanks for the feed. yeah, i'm also not too sure about this one, it's a lot different than what i've done before which is why i wanted to get some feedback on it, see if others were a bit skeptical about it, like myself. I think the lyrics are tight, but the mood of the song just doesn't quite bring it...

[Sentus]

This could have been a great song if you would have had a better delivery. It kind of ruined the song.

[QwarterZ]

The flow kinda caught me off guard
it bugged me more then anything...sounds like ol' Em shit
but it's still dope regardless, but sometimes its just confusing
it's like you just tryna keep the flow on track
which is cool, but you know, it didn't really feel....right
either way...nice drop 0_0

[TheNobleOne]

yeah wasnt really feelin this as a "track" per say. more like a spoken word type piece to me. there wasnt really a beat with your flow, hard to follow something like that. you were also a bit monotone, you gotta put some emotion and energy into it, even on some dark shit like this. but just keep doin ya thing man and keep workin to tighten your shit up.