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Pause For The Cause.
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- Kuhlerblynd
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Re: Pause For The Cause.
This was nice. Although the topic isnt a new one by any means, you flipped it really well and I was digging it. The last verse was my favorite, but kinda wish you would have left out the parenthesis because I just feel it just takes away from a verse. Only people that have no concept of how hip hop lyrics are put together should be the ones to have no clue what you were doing with your wordplay. I like the style you have and can see this easily being put to a beat. Over all Im going with a 7.5 out of ten. Props. Would like to collab sometime. One.
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Re: Pause For The Cause.
that was pretty nice the whole thing was greatYet still, when it came to pushing buttons it was easy as A, B...//
C/see, so D,E,F, such a dark past, but still a smart ass//
Knew where to "draw the line" & I ain't even take art class//

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Re: Pause For The Cause.
I Read this A Couple Of Days Ago And Was Suprised That u Would Use This Line... I Think Highly Of U Bro..Come On LolFriends baring more arms than Goro, mortal combat//
I Liked What U Tried With The First verse Its A Different Approach To What You Usually Try But i Think U Couldve Smooth It Out A Lil.
The Perspective of the second verse is hot... I Can See How Kids People Get So Involved They Tend To Waste Plenty Of Time On It..A Lot Smoother With The Flow
Bangin Ass Third Verse man... Good Metaphores And Word Play And It Was Smooth The Whole Way Thru.... Nice Drop Over All Did Not Quote Cuz Im At Work..Nice Writing Though
BANG BANG!!!! I Shot U Down
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Re: Pause For The Cause.
This shit is getting slept on, the concept wasn't the most original yet the execution was spot on. Multies were on point, flow was on point, and the creativity was on point, I even give you props for having each verse an even 16 bars, that's what differentiates actual perfectionist mc's and amatuer 'internet rappers', dope shit.
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