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In Through The Light (Poem)

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Two crowded kids, of a young face (A)
Radiates in glist from it's Sun rays (A)
On a play ground, they pushin' swings (B)
One gaze (A)
Walk towards an shade, look and see (B)
Escaped into the light and (C)
Whom much sited (C)
The entire picture seem to be (D)
An environmental scenery (D)
These beautiful people (E)
Just smiles, and enjoy
In World of removing all evil (E)

{Female}
Into the.. (x8)
Da dum.
Da dum da.
Da dum.
See the light..

-- Sat Aug 07, 2010 7:56 am --

It was short.. lol but thats all I had..
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Re: In Through The Light (Poem)

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This Belongs In Distilled Concepts... I Dont Get The AABAB Shit...... As For A Poem It Would Be Ok But U Lacked In Content...Ie.. Just got Me A Lil Interested And I Wouldve Put A Lil Time To Read This But Then It Ended Abruptly... Seemed Original Too... And That Hooked Sucked... Exclude That Next Time... Once Again Man... BE ORIGINAL ...UR SELF.... If I Aint Click This From The Main Page I Wouldve Never Read Knowing It Was U.... Cuz U Emulate Pac And Are A Follower Thats Scared To Come Up With Ur Own Material... If u Drop That Shit Id Say U Almost Have Potential
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