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Re: Sinderella (Hate).

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It's more bitter than sweet, opening flood gates the very moment rain struck//
Then nobody fixes shit, it's the "mask-era", people just "make-up"//
Meaning they just cover it up, hide the problems w/out fixing it//
Broken hearts stay broken, adults being kids again, no one gives a shit
Dam dude.. it paints the picture for real...
The romantics never said I was winning, still I came in first//
Cuz grandma taught me "don't play on women, play on words"//
I felt that right there...insightfu
[/quote]Hit the Nuvia ring, only put on the gloves once things get rocky//
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Aha!... Deep Tho
Men learned how to domesticate violence, so women call the cops//
In the end relationships are like a glass of Scotch, on the rocks//
Another dope line here
Hanging myself w/ a bed sheet is the only time I'll ever tie the knot//
i must say this is a sort of my thoughts on this issue for real!
I hate how I love the pain, the sadness, the rage, madness//
It's an insane habit, but when it comes to women --

I' don't wanna hit singles, I'd rather date classics//
Pretty good ending there rugg.... i wouldve broken down the first paragrapg but im at work so.... i gave u what i could from the time i could sneak lol... over all DOPE as hell... ur writing is vivid dude.. for real..had some great lines and bars in there...good concept and great flow as well.. i can see u taking this a step further a write short stories on topics suck as these since it seems... Seems that this is just ez for u... dope drop sun!
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Re: Sinderella (Hate).

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i'm starting to gain a lot of respect for you as a writer. you should stick to this stuff and stop battling though. this is your shit dude, it's just hella good that's all i can say!
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Re: Sinderella (Hate).

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Damn my dude your rhymes on this were sick
I'm really feeling the first verse tho', the vibe was on point
the wordage fitted nicely, nothing I can say about that

the 2nd verse was a nice way to pick it back up tho', the vibe was still there, but it took a different route, I'm digging this one aswell man, you really did you....

the 3rd.....*whew* you and your helluva reads man, either way I was feeling the whole vibe, you really pointed out some real shit
which I enjoyed aswell, a nice grasp of reality really makes a piece shine

well, everything you wrote in this was on point
the whole vibe was nutsssssssss!
I'm feeling what you saying with this one man, I'd peep the other
but I'm scared its got like 23802380 lines, but I'll peep it

keep writing my dude!
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Re: Sinderella (Hate).

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nice job man, the beat makes it much more epic
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Re: Sinderella (Hate).

Post by Soulo »

Lyrics are dope, but I didn't feel the beat.
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Re: Sinderella (Hate).

Post by - Mutual - »

yeah this had some nice emotion to it, the beat really conveyed that, the topical was executed well man some real shit here, not alot i can say that aint already been said, but i'll check out your other (love) one later man this was a good read
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

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