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BANG BANG!!!! I Shot U Down
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Post by Shady_08 »

wow man :X good flow, very good flow! five outta five! ten outta ten! :)>- peace... keep goin' at it! awesome lyrics too.
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Re: Ventilation

Post by Loon E Lou »

yes yes yes. this i like dawg. this sounds waaaay better than prolly anythin ive heard from you. i think this flow puts u a lot closer to ur true potential. the delivery was very good compared to other drops youve posted. intro was dope as hell sounds legit. you dropped perfect i think. vocab was above par as always man. the ONLY thing i can suggest prolly jus stayin on tip the whole track. like....u fell off a lil but not all crazy. still waaaay better than the shit out here. i think you should paint a story dawg. like make a full trak. tellin a story or sumtn. wit hooks and everything. i think youd be pretty dope at that. definetly sumtn i would like to hear. also the production sounded real good. ur lyrics were very clear and understandable. no echo or shit as far as i can hear. id give this a 7/10 cus i think u can come harder. not in content, but delivery. great progession dawg real talk.
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Post by Bearded Fury »

This was purdy cool man, nice lines
I think you need to keep pushin' on...like time
I done listened to this again and again....like twice
you spit that real shit man, keep it up, like price
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Post by FlipSide »

Thanks for the peep fellas and loon e im still workin on it but u kno.... shit been happnin... And yea im working on a few things right now so i hope i can put something descent out... again thanks for the feed and giving a shout to my boy mutual for cleaning the vocals up...dude comes thru... uppin
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Re: Ventilation

Post by ScottJames »

it was aight. pretty decent. u rushed a few words here n there, mostly @ the beginning. but still did ur thing. nice job.
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Post by HKX »

I thought dis was decent dawg I would really like 2 hear emotion on da track tho I heard u fall off a lil. By far 1 of da best drops dat u have dropped in da chamber. Ur gettin' better so dats good man jus keep doin' ur thing homie stay on point wit da flow and u should be good.
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Re: Ventilation

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Dope it will be nice when it finished and longer
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yeah man you already know my feed on the piece aint feelin the beat too much but the lyrics were pretty nice and you had the flow to go with them that worked well, also you didnt sound like you were reading it so that i alot better, aiight man thanks for the shout on the production yeah man we got this shit happenin lets keep'em on they toes with it lol
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

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Post by ~Symbolikull~ »

shit was sick man... every time i peep somethin of urs the next thing i peep is better... so two thumbs up

i thought u did ur thang on this shit although u did fall off here n thurr

props
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Thanks for the feed Fellas.... very much appreciated as well... everytime some one points a flaw it helps...
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Re: Ventilation

Post by NoVeL »

YOooooooooooooooooooooooo

This Shit Was HOTT KIDD, Boppin Mah Head n Everything. Only Critique Stop Slurrin' Ya Words When You Rush It Takes Alot of Breath & Fucks You Up But Other Than Dat 8/10 I Believe You Can Do Much Better in Another Take.
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Re: Ventilation

Post by STUD_PHaMOUS »

this was pretty decent, stumbled on a few words, flow was kinda choppy, just work on perfecting it
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Re: Ventilation

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Thanks bro... i do intend to make full tracks out of a lot of my work...i just wanna be polished when i do to make a mix tape.. and i credit most my growth to this site.. that harsh feed was actually what i was looking for when i joined. It has helped and i also look foward to harsh feed out of my full length audios as well... Thanks fellas
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Re: Ventilation

Post by K KiLLaH »

yeah keep stepping it up man ur almost there definitley imroving keep working hard and ull be there in know time
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