i dont luv you

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i dont luv you

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ready to bounce when i start sobering up
u aint realized i call when i wanna come over n fuck
i only call into the late of the night
then leave when i lay down the pipe
but you never attempt to shake off this thug.
if i loved you. id take off the glove
all i want is just to fold them hips
shove my tank into them swollen lips
girl you aint no gal of mine.
newsflash wonder why i wasnt there for valentine's
no heart, never been a man of guilt.
you was home alone, i wuz crusin vanderbilt
i stay cause you buy me shit to rock this summer
& you know dez dudes got generic pop like dr thunder
cause i dont love you. you plt these hoes against me
they not leaving cause i keep doe like oprah winfrey
ima keep 100 when i line these fakes out
think we be in public girl, we eating chinese takeout


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This is a horribly structured, uncreative piece of shit. Grow a vocabulary, breed it with an imagination, and try again. Or maybe stick to the scriptures, your call.

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Don't listen to Double F.L ( aka C.Cs double aka Chris crocker's double) she's a female err i think...She has no idea what she's talking about... and TOYH types in pink...

It's alright.

Come and kneel before the great Dosia...and you will be blessed with skills beyond your wildest dreams!
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Substinence will get you further than stupidity, jussouno.

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eh...
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I'm often soft like cotton but my message is clear, my words hold weight like "dumbos" ears.
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this was more of a cypher.. i put it in the wrong spot..
and for poetic juggernaut, u can go fuck yourself...
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