I Am Abandoned

[Deciple]

This is an old track i wrote like 2 years ago and to me a song is a song, so i recorded and well this is what i got... Let me know what you all think.. Feed is Welcome

LYRICS:

OKay Let me start it with the subject on my mind
Discussed with world and all the sin of all the different kind
All the power All the drugs with all the violence and the girls
So much stuff that we be doing thats destroying our little world
Let me break it down for those who dont fully understand
Telling first about the main one which is power of the man
Dont think you have the power to condem a man to death
Who are we to take a life if we aint the ones that gave the breath
The only true power is from God himself
So just ask him for help or keep the cards your dealt
cuz we all know true power is in power to pray
so just speak it and say bout the sins of ur day
going to write
the wrong and the right
the dark and the night
the black and the white
comming to see why we shinning so bright
Giving the word about jesus tonight
starting a fight and be dropping the rain
dropping the rain and be never to blame
never to blame in the word of his name
always be different and never the same

(HooK)
I Am abandoned I am abandoned
The devil left my soul thats what god commanded
I am abandoned I am abandoned
My soul my heart my mind thats what god demanded

Okay time for two here we go lets get it through
Get it through about the truth speak the truth on what we do
what we do and what we say affects the people of today
So dont go out and mess around and take away another day
from your life its your right to say no and fight the fight
Jesus Christ had die for our lives thats no lie
So when ya down and it seems so wrong take this track and play this song
you will know what keeps you strong even when the roads so long
When ya strug dont take drugs but take love from above
Devils coming to push and shove commin over to rip that rug
from our feet definetly we can fight this spirtituly
take your sword and your shield we are going to the battle field
To attack, just in fact, Jesus Christ has got our back
Mary Jane aint no game dont be fooled by the name
Only high that you need is the one from JC
Its your choice and what ya see but you whatcha see will soon to be

I Am abandoned I am abandoned
The devil left my soul thats what god commanded
I am abandoned I am abandoned
My soul my heart my mind thats what god demanded

OKay Last one this is it then im done
always searching for that one to give you daughter or that son
People always looking in the wrong direction and the place
never looking at the heart just looking for that pretty face
Why do people look at places that they know is always wrong
always with the lustful eyes and never keep the heart so strong
If ya base relationships around the worldly goods and needs
You just need to watch yourself and get alone with the G.O.D.
Coming down from P-town representing with the crown
Same old stuff different day this is what i got to say
Bout this love stuff that i know dont hide it but let it show
Dont get a girl that just dont know Try and get a girl that will go show
Love is something from the heart that should be shared with seriously
Age dont matter to the heart if ya bonded spiritually
If ya have to fight for love just make sure that you know its right
Just remember god gave you the greatest love with sacrifice

I Am abandoned I am abandoned
The devil left my soul thats what god commanded
I am abandoned I am abandoned
My soul my heart my mind thats what god demanded

[Young K]

Beat is hot man, flow is kool, and lyrics are nice, quality is nice as well.

I would work on the hook it's alright but could be a lot better.

Good drop though, you got skills.

-K

[Loon E Lou]

haha. this shit is dope. rode the beat sick. u got that swag i be hearin all over my area so its ku to hear a style that hits home. that west coast typa shit. the hook..........eh.......lets jus say your verses were dope. overall its dope. ku drop. u seem like sum1 i could def get on a track cus like i said, your whole stilo is what these locos out here be slappin. good shit


Loon E out........

[Deciple]

I agree the hook is wack, i wrote that hook 5 min before recording and figured spit it that way.. If you guys wanna take a stab at it and do a hook or suggestions let me know...
Thanks for the feed guys
~~Deciple~~

[~Symbolikull~]

this shit is straight sick homie... lovin the tongue twistin... kinda reminds me of what im tryin now a days lol shit was sick all i can say i like the hook too... the whole song was dope i would bump this for it bein christian rap

[Deciple]

Thanks man.. appreciated.. Keep the feed coming and i will keep bringing the tracks
~~Deciple~~

-- Wed Feb 17, 2010 11:59 pm --

Uppin for more feedback, I will post another track once i get 10 different feeds from 10 different people..