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Lifes Rough ft. Haz

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Plex
Haz

Welcome to the state that I'm metaphorically at
I self deprecate more than I bask in my not so glorious past
this is a story of fact, I was born to be cast
like my father as a notorious ass, performing the act
that I choreographed, paving the warriors path
without a warning I'd snap, it was four in the morning
I was pouring a glass, praying to God that my organs would last
dreams of how I could torture my dad in Kevorkian's lab
I know what your thinking, poor ian, his fortunes are bad
he's up drinking because of a divorce and its sad
but he wasn't beaten like haz, trapped in a corner, forced to react
wondering where the gun is at, what kind of son is that
I'm torn between the dreams I want to have, and the ones I had
both haunt my mom, which has brought upon
more stress than I can acknowledge on
this track, get me a polygraph, this facade I've drawn
has gone along, all too long, I'm not so strong
this monkey on my back is as fat as donkey kong
I can go on and on, yada yada, blah blah, problems pile on
I will wrong until that mild gong makes its final dong


Pops beat The sense out Me,
I've Developed Common Sense Though..
He Beat Me Unconcious ..
Yet Hit Me With Common Sense Flow ..
Mother Got Cancer, Kams a Real Book Geek,
He's Already Focused..
Look How Long Its Took Me ..
Going Homeless Brought My Home Togetha
We Came Up Short But Never Moaned Fa Betta
Mom Needz Treatments But Can't Out Loans Fa Chedda
So i'm On My Own In a Zone Of Beggas ..
See Me Not Being Able To Take Loans Out,
Makes Me Break n Zone Out...
Till scout my Neck n wanna Start Testing My Belt,
Start Drinking till i ain't Thinking Fuck it till my Intestines'll Melt..
On the Upside I Feel My Debt Is a Help..
I'm 33,000 Down Bu6 Upping Morals So i'm Never in Debt With Myself ..
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Re: Lifes Rough ft. Haz

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Wow, That Was Dope Man. Haz I Think That's The First Verse I've Ever Read Of Yours That Actually Made Sense.. Dope Piece Fellas, good Shit On Both Parts, I'll Take My Hat Off To Y'all Dudes Even.
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Re: Lifes Rough ft. Haz

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Plex - "Welcome to the state that I'm metaphorically at
I self deprecate more than I bask in my not so glorious past
this is a story of fact, I was born to be cast
like my father as a notorious ass, performing the act
that I choreographed, paving the warriors path
without a warning I'd snap, it was four in the morning
I was pouring a glass, praying to God that my organs would last
dreams of how I could torture my dad in Kevorkian's lab"

Haz - "Going Homeless Brought My Home Togetha
We Came Up Short But Never Moaned Fa Betta
Mom Needz Treatments But Can't Out Loans Fa Chedda
So i'm On My Own In a Zone Of Beggas .."

I co-sign with TOYH on Plex.. I think you came up short in the end, like you were just pushing it out to finish it.. we've all done it, you wanna get the product out but should probably go through another line of inspections and not end up like Toyota. The beginning was nice tho.

I don't feel the same about HAZ's as TOYH did tho'. For some odd reason, I couldn't gather the flow very well. I've seen you flow with a sense of damn perfection in the chat box, but this one was choppy to me. Could be me tho..

Other than that.. I liked the topic, I liked the collab. Always enjoy seeing different styles come together in unity.
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Re: Lifes Rough ft. Haz

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yeah was a good read, haz i wish your's was a tad longer and elabarated abit more on you're past expeirence's, complexity's verse was pretty dope and consistant like always, wasnt a bad collab dude's keep it up, looking forward to another one.
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