look..
i want you for all for my own, i can deal with selfish..
but to see you act this way just got this boy feelin helpless
Ive never really dealt with all this stress and emotion
I would give you my all girl, my best - my devotion
And I'm just hopin.. you could let this man have a chance
another dance at this love thing, to send you back to romance
And i know i pushed to break it first.. i portrayed the jerk
but it made me love u more so it really didnt make shit worse,
u let me go because u loved me, the mistakes i made still hurt
so please come back to me, i know it will take some work,
but i swear if you want the same we could really make this work..
I left you all alone, at the moment you needed me the most,
i burned your heart to ashes, and now i'm breathing in the smoke
the pride blinded me of the treasures, I tried to pleasure other stuff
i broke the rules & the ruler that showed the measures of ur love
Freedom was what I requested, a protest against what seemed
a love i was scared of having and now u protect yourself from me...
I was really lying to myself, a fool for just leaving you stunned
and To think that I could drop you after all that you've done
Just like that, I pushed you away..now you're not close to me
now that i know where Im supposed to be, you're already over me
Ill do it all to make it happen, This is a promise babe I'm honest,
I know I'm stupid, I know my choices made me look Ironic!!
It was a stunt I pulled, It was no good reason to leave...
How can I leave my air for the excuse i cannot breathe?
Please Want me again, need me, girl miss me again..
And of the most physical torment... please kiss me again
I left you numb out in the cold, and I know i made you cry
But as you gather strength to get up to walk your way inside
I want to let you know something, a choice i cannot hide
now that your warming up indoors, its me you will not find
You'd expect me to be good now, feeling the way you do today
But I'm still out there in the cold.. still numbing from the pain
See I know you closed me out, and Im sorry for what Ive caused
But you never left my heart, so now i know it really was my loss
Im sorry for my lies, the words i said to stab you in the heart
But it was a trial for me.. fate wanted us momentarily apart
I seek forgiveness, I love you, I want you to see that this is true
If you dont ill lose my soul, cuz there really isnt me without you
baby this foul deserves another shot, so send me to the line
i wrote this poem in hopes that it'll end with you as mine..
Im soo sorry...
take it all back...
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Re: take it all back...
Damn, I could feel the emotion dripping from this piece and I can identify with it. There were a lot of great lines but two of the ones that stood out to me:
"I burned your heart to ashes, now I'm breathing in the smoke"
and
"How can I leave my air, for the excuse I cannot breathe?"
Good drop bro.
"I burned your heart to ashes, now I'm breathing in the smoke"
and
"How can I leave my air, for the excuse I cannot breathe?"
Good drop bro.
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Re: take it all back...
Soon as I have a computer I'll feed this better, but I will say this:
You know how I feel about this kind of writing, but dude, I felt this. The girl in me feels really bad for you, and I think we need to talk lol (even if this has been worked out by now, it's been ages, dude!). The writer in me feels the need to tell you that it's really simple and you could work on your vocabulary. I'm sorry it's just who I am lol.
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-- 17 Jan 2010 02:51 --
Lol i'm a moderator and I can't edit posts. I need my computer back.
Anyway, all that said, I thought it was a fairly good drop and give it a 7
You know how I feel about this kind of writing, but dude, I felt this. The girl in me feels really bad for you, and I think we need to talk lol (even if this has been worked out by now, it's been ages, dude!). The writer in me feels the need to tell you that it's really simple and you could work on your vocabulary. I'm sorry it's just who I am lol.
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-- 17 Jan 2010 02:51 --
Lol i'm a moderator and I can't edit posts. I need my computer back.
Anyway, all that said, I thought it was a fairly good drop and give it a 7
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