4AmStillRockin

3lmo · Post by **3lmo** » Thu Mar 12, 2009 4:36 am

this like a sample of a mixtape, I couldnt find a longeer version

My eyes Feel like they weigh about Million
dey rollin opposite ways like-a cammillione
I forgot my damn name, but the crowd yellin 3lmo
if u step on my shoes watch be throw dem elbows
Im lookin at the clock, shit its 4 A.M.
fuk a rockstar we party like a mexican
we party till morning, my pops stay snoring
we knock a niga out, if ya dare to say its boring
I stay dancing my balls sweaty like a bitch
my girl askin me if she can have a lick
theres a lot of alcohol, and dey askin for some more
but its too late dey done closed the fucken liqor store
we work around the clock, and we aint wasting it
my time is precious,but what I do dont mean a shit
dont crash my party if so we takin lifes
Im Out this Bitch like three Strikes

SolQet · Post by **SolQet** » Fri Mar 13, 2009 2:26 am

i liked dis shit, a short lil joint. i think ya vocals coulda been a lil louda or maybe a lil mo emo~ but ya lyrics are tyte n i was definately feelin da overall flooow. good job!

3lmo · Post by **3lmo** » Fri Mar 13, 2009 2:56 am

thanks for the positives

Haze · Post by **Haze** » Fri Mar 13, 2009 4:19 am

That was wack. I turned it off bout 12 seconds into this shit. no delivery no flow lyrics are basic.

Step ya shit up.

3lmo · Post by **3lmo** » Fri Mar 13, 2009 4:49 am

thanks for being honest I guess....

Petrafyne · Post by **Petrafyne** » Sun Mar 15, 2009 12:43 am

It's Okay, Sounds Like The Effect Is Louder Than Your Vocals But..Timing Was On, Just It Sound Very Rehearsed Know Wut I Mean, Un-natural Like You Was Readin It And You Was A Bad Reader.

Cuttin P · Post by **Cuttin P** » Sun Mar 15, 2009 4:00 pm

yea i agree with P. The beat is there, the hook is there... all ya gotta work on is ya verse. Like me, you seemed to put an effect on ya verse but it's hella low for the beat... also it's mono-toned... add some flavor to ya verse to living it up and it'll be ready to go!

ps... i'ma start NOT puttin effects on my verses and master that shit

RAJE · Post by **RAJE** » Tue Mar 17, 2009 4:05 am

as said, you need to raise the level on that verse.

content is ok, but could use a little work just to tighten it up a degree.

beats good and hook is good, with a little work i think this could be a hot track.

Haze if your gonna drop neg feed like that the least you can do is give the dude some constructive comments... no point in bein a hater.

keep at it 3lmo

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